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| "The Posession Series 1: Break In" Reviews/Comments [ 11 ] | Title: Reply to Freak on a leash
Reviewed By: Kawaii-KeKe-Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2008 17:00 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just wanted to reply to Freak on a leash, because the review peeved me a little: 1.)I don't beleive Kenshin is out of character. First and foremost, this is fan fiction and these events never occured in the manga, so we don't know how Kenshin would have reacted. Furthermore, we rarely see Battousai's side...i think in this fic, he has been captured well. If Battousai and Kenshin were to be imatations of the manga/anime, there would be no romantic fan fics what so ever!! 2.)I believe the '!' that are used are used correctly. This is a tense situtation- furthermore, Kaoru is very expressive in the manga, so I think the author's use of her '!' are justified. 3.) Again, I must remind the reviewer this is fan fiction . Also, Kaoru is very bi-polar. One minute she's hitting Kenshin, the next she's hugging him in tears. Like I said before, she is very expressive, and therefore if you don't see this, it is your misjudgement, not the author's. Also, it was made clear Kaoru was caught be surprise. And isn't she captured enough in the manga? She's not invincible. 4.) To ensure Kaoru's safety, Kenshin allowed them to be tied up. Also, I'm tkaing liberty in assuming what the author mean, but I think it would hve been safer for him to be tied up, so not to slaughter the robbers. And also, Karou was naked, darling. Of course Kenshin wanted to be tied up with her! Well, that's my rant over ^.~
| Title: Wow!!
Reviewed By: Kawaii-KeKe-Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2008 16:50 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wahhhhh! I loved this. I mean, utterly, comppletely, LOVED IT! The Battousai side of Kenshin is damn hot, and you brought this out clearly and beautifully! The tension caused by the robbers and Karou's arosual was a stroke of genius! I could feel myself in Kaoru's shoes...I would melt in a quivering heap if I had to be tied to the Battousai, naked none the less! ^.^ On my way to read your next part! Kudos for the excellent work, and thanks for keeping me entertained!
| Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2008 00:53 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wonderful story... really liked it... good job... great work...
| Reviewed By: _luv_naraku_ [MediaMiner Member] On: September 18, 2007 13:35 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
i reeally enjoyed it! hope to read another one soon!
| Reviewed By: _luv_naraku_ [MediaMiner Member] On: September 18, 2007 13:24 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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my second time reading this. great job! i bet the robbers peed in their pants
| Reviewed By: kitsuneluvuh [MediaMiner Member] On: August 01, 2005 13:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, this was good. Not quite as good as the other one (spelling and grammar wise) but you are definitely talented in writing interesting fanfiction.
| Reviewed By: Freak on a leash On: June 14, 2005 18:51 CDT
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I really think this fic has potential, but there are a few peeves that I have. 1.)Kenshin is waaaaaay out of character. So is Battosai. I liked how you made Kenshin speak, but there is NO way in seven hells that Kenshin-or Battosai, would let himself be overtaken by a few weak robbers. Let only have Kaoru be slapped by one. 2.)The wording is good, but there are a few too many '!' in the story. I can see that you are trying to get a strong expression across, and it works, but its just so often that it loses meaning. 3.) Kaoru is a little too er, Bi-polar in this fic. One moment she's horny as hell, and the next minute she's crying. And I honestly don't think Kaoru, a master of Kamiya Kasshin Ryu, would let herself be tied up. 4.) Why on earth did they just let the robbers tie them up, and then leave? Battosai and Kaoru would've struggled a little bit more if they were in such grave danger. I really do like this fic, and I just want to help make a good fic better.
| Reviewed By: Mill On: June 08, 2005 23:34 CDT
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Dude! This is hot! Keep it up!
| Reviewed By: 0989d On: May 29, 2005 22:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow this is freaking awesome! so seductive ;)
| Reviewed By: Darksquire [MediaMiner Member] On: May 26, 2005 22:12 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ah yes. I like it. It is good. I want more that I do. Well I shall go now. Write more and I shall read more. Yes.
| Title: Ch 1
Reviewed By: RedHedLvr (not logged in) On: May 26, 2005 06:29 CDT
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Kenshin should have gone Battousai on those guys! I mean, he didn't have to kill'em, but he could have put a serious hurt on them anyway. But then, there'd be no story so don't mind me. Great start and I hope you post the rest soon.
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