| "Claiming" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] |
Reviewed By: Koski [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2006 01:45 CDT
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Please update.
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Reviewed By: dudekiller(2 lazy 2 sign in) On: September 22, 2005 17:15 CDT
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i really liked this story. tho it was kind of odd for kagome to show so little faith in inuyasha. i am interested to see how you will resolve this. please update soon.
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Reviewed By: insane On: September 14, 2005 15:43 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
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What the hell!??! I was expecting something a little different than that! Why didn't Inuyasha just explain what it ment to smell like him?
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Reviewed By: InusDemoness [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2005 03:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
Continued: And I thought that Kagome would be more touched that Inuyasha was thinking of protecting her with his scent. But the way she blew up at him went into that OOC part because she was saying "if he died". Kagome has never shown such little faith in him and it just really felt wrong for her say those things. And it made it seem like she thought that was worse than what she had just done with him. It was pretty stupid of her to get mad at him over his scent being on her when the privet moment they had would put his scent on her more than ever. If she's that worried about smelling like him then I hope she doesn't want anymore sexual things happening between them *mumbles yeah right under breath* Well that's it for me. Other than those things I thought your story was pretty well written, I don't remember any spelling mistakes at all.
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Reviewed By: InusDemoness [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2005 03:33 CDT
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My questions/comments/concerns/opinions on the first chapters begin with Kagome swearing because of course that's OOC. I also find it hard to believe that Sango being a demon slayer and being around demon slayers all her life didn't know what a thunder was. And it was even more unbelievable when I remember that she was with when Souten of the thunder demon clan wanted to challeng Shippou. And then there's the fact that Souten was the last of the that thunder clan so it didn't make sense for that demon to say Inuyasha killed his cusins unless in your fic Inuyasha has killed more thunder demons from a different clan. It was also a little predictable with Inuyasha going full demon and trying to rape Kagome. But when she sat him and he turned back it was weird to me that he didn't ask if he had hurt her or realized that her wounds were way more serious than the others and help her first. Even she didn't want them to know what happened he could have helped her first seeing as how she was covered in blood and everything. And the whole Inuyasha crying on her wounds sounds like something from Harry Potter but I'm not accusing you of stealing. Another thing is how does Kagome just aotumatically assume Inuyasha came in his pants? I know it was written that he collapsed with her but the fact that she just knew to think that made her seem even more OOC.
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Title: Claiming
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: September 13, 2005 23:19 CDT
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I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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Title: omfg
Reviewed By: BK On: September 12, 2005 20:37 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WHAT THE HELL WAS THAT YOU CANT DO THAT KIND OF SHIT GOD DAMNIT -is so pissed is up ranting and raving- HOW HOW COULD YOU DO THAT HURT POOR INUYASHA THAT WAY IF YOU DONT UPDATE SOON AND MAKE IT ALL BETTER ILL FUCKIN FIND YOU AND KILL YOU >=| (na i wont ill just hell and scream) SO UPDATE SOON DAMNIT OR THERE WILL BE HELL TO PAY allways watching BK
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Title: Claiming
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2005 20:34 CDT
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I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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Reviewed By: jtcl [MediaMiner Member] On: May 27, 2005 11:18 CDT
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I like it It is a good story I hope you up date soon .
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Reviewed By: kagome15 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 27, 2005 06:11 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great story!!! ^_^ update
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