| "Secrets" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] |
Reviewed By: hiei is all mine On: April 17, 2007 00:51 CDT
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omigawd!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ur story rocks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! but i h8 the cliffie. please update (really) soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Title: keep going
Reviewed By: kagsinred [MediaMiner Member] On: February 05, 2006 02:28 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
-_-# this is the 3rd bloody cliffie I've ran into today.(well this morning since it's 4 at my home.) UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON...Your story is really excellent...I LOVE THE PAIRING! wooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON !!!~~~~~~~
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Title: hello!
Reviewed By: shiroi hana lover of hiei [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2005 10:49 CST
Comment/Review:
hey! it's almost thanksgiving and no review! love the fic please update!
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Reviewed By: Chezlesea [MediaMiner Member] On: July 28, 2005 07:06 CDT
Comment/Review:
Love the story.
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Reviewed By: KharmaGurl On: July 16, 2005 02:52 CDT
Comment/Review:
oops..forgot to put update soon please! -_-;;;
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Reviewed By: KharmaGurl On: July 16, 2005 02:51 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
-_-# this is the 3rd bloody cliffie I've ran into today.(well this morning since it's 4 at my home.)
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Reviewed By: HeartStar [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2005 14:46 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You know that was just evil and you know it... I love this story please update soon.
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Reviewed By: MH (moonsharmony) ... still very lazy On: July 09, 2005 02:20 CDT
Comment/Review:
Eh, sorry to bother you again, but I have one other little comment that I feel would help you. And that is to try and be a bit more descriptive. For example, your opening paragraph, "Kagome Higurashi was walking home from a restaurant when she feels an evil aura in the park so she goes to check it out. She runs deep into the forest behind the park. There she sees something horrible. Something she thought she defeated. She sees Naraku." Perhaps have something like, 'The gentle moon glow lighted the park as Kagome Higurashi quietly strolled home after a late dinner at a local restaurant. A heavy chill crept up her spine as she sensed an evil aura hiding in the park's forest. Dashing blindly into the forest Kagome finds a nightmare she had believed finally over. A nightmare she and her friends had fought long and hard to end. Her hand closes convulsively around the area of her neck where the shards of the Shikon had once lain as her horrified mind whispers a single devastating name 'Naraku....'' This way it gives a sense of time as well as a better picture of what she is doing and what she is feeling. Just adding a few more details as you write can really create a much clearer picture of your characters. There now I'm done. Good luck!
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Reviewed By: MH (moonsharmony) ... too lazy to sign in On: July 09, 2005 02:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
How can Kagome be half fire AND ice and then half fire dragon as well? She would have to be 1/4 fire and 1/4 ice and half fire dragon or a third of each. Also, most importantly to me, Kagome is a miko as well. That is one of the strongest defining aspects of her. So even the above equation are not accurate as none of them account for her miko heritage. Genetically speaking it's not even possible since a person can only receive one chromosome from each parent. So technically speaking even if her parents were half and half, she could only receive one demonic type from each parent. But since this is a story obviously the rules of normal genetics do not apply. Your story seems like it could potentially be very good, but there is one thing that bothers me. The mixing of Kagome as a demon and miko. I see this plot quite often and find it vexing. I have seen a few plots that actually make it plausible. Sometimes she is a demon and miko fighting for balance all the time, capable of only use one power at a time, or she's blessed by the gods (that seems like cheating to me, it's too easy). If you could thoroughly address this issue and explain it, I feel it would make your story much better. Maybe even have it so one of her powers was mistaken for miko powers? But then you'd still have to explain how she purified the shards. Anyway, it's not a bad start for story writing, and I hope you continue to write your stories.
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Reviewed By: gcdv [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2005 00:46 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON...Your story is really excellent...I LOVE THE PAIRING! wooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON UPDATE SOON !!!~~~~~~~ |
Reviewed By: hieis_mate (looged out) On: June 05, 2005 16:27 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
update soon.
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Title: Secrets
Reviewed By: dARK sOUL On: June 05, 2005 09:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great Story!!!! I Hop it is a hiei kagome pairing!!! Please update soon!!!!! I cant wait!!!
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