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| "Yesterday's Girl" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] | Reviewed By: AlphaBeta On: July 23, 2007 00:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was one of your greatest works by far.
| Title: Wow . . .
Reviewed By: Master Nemesis [MediaMiner Member] On: October 04, 2006 05:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I simply do not have the words to describe how much I enjoyed this fic. From the start, it grabbed my attention and reeled me in. Reading this story was, as the saying goes, 'like watching a train wreck'. There were so many times during this story where I could see that it wasn't gong to end well, and I told myself to stop reading, but I just could not pull my eyes away. I needed to see what happened next. On another note, this fic is pretty dark and twisted, but it just adds even more to the story. One thing I enjoyed was the part about halfway through in which it seems that most of Shinji's problems are solved. By temporarily pulling away from the angst and depression, it manages to give the reader a bit of breathing room and the strength to keep reading, while at the same time it sets Shinji up for an even bigger fall from grace. A final thing I'd like to mention is that I really enjoyed the ending. Even though it's sad and tragic, it's also an extremely satisfying end to an extremely satisfying tale. One cannot help but feel relieved that Shinji has finally found peace with himself and his inner demons, namely Asuka. Overall, this is one of the best fics i have ever read, period. Something tells me that you aren't far from becoming the next Anno Hideaki. ;) I applaud you.
| Reviewed By: wildcard On: August 17, 2006 10:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
i must admit, that was very intence... it reminded me of a Dean Koontz book where this guy kept killing women who looked like his mother....but anyways, great fic!
| Title: FFRG Review Ch. 1
Reviewed By: Sueric [MediaMiner Member] On: December 08, 2005 01:08 CST
Comment/Review:
Thanks for submitting to FFRG! Firstly, let me say that your chapter was quite interesting, and I enjoyed reading it very much. A few things of note, however, did jump at me. Firstly, while I do think that short, concise sentences do help to emphasize a point, I felt as though some of them, especially the ones that weren't complete sentences, tended to lend a choppier feel to your writing than I think you were after. A good beta can help you with this. The second thing that really stood out to me was the use of all capital letters and multiple punctuation marks to add emphasis. The same stress can be added with either italics or with the use of speech tags, such as he/she bellowed/yelled/exclaimed. Those kinds of things stand out even more significantly, given the quality of your work. As in most better-written pieces, things of that nature tend to be even more noticeable than they might be in something of lesser quality. Overall, however, I found your writing to be quite strong with very distinct style. Very nicely done! Your speech was very good and didn't seem at all stilted or forced. A nice read! I thank you again, for submitting this chapter to FFRG, and I wish you luck in your evolution as a writer!
| Reviewed By: AHK On: August 16, 2005 23:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed the storyline and the way the characters were written. This is definitely one of my favorites.
| Reviewed By: alucard123 On: June 06, 2005 09:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
that was incredibly good ...wow kept me interested the whole time , i was completely zoned out on everything else because i was reading this it was really really good
| Reviewed By: D: On: June 01, 2005 01:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good writing, but it pretty much seems more like you took an original piece of work and just pasted the Eva characters names in. Doesn't mean it was bad... just a bit out of place for Eva. The story would work really well on its own and not as a fanfiction.
| Reviewed By: Mr. Pointy On: May 28, 2005 10:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great work man.
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