| "A New Light" Reviews/Comments [ 25 ] |
Reviewed By: kokoronagomu [MediaMiner Member] On: November 12, 2008 00:58 CST
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love your story. one thing: ♦the OVA 'seisohen' (samuraiX reflections) is an abomination and a blight to the whole concept, principle, ideals and moral of the 'rurouni kenshin' series. ♣ other than that, this is a wonderful story and i certainly hope you're still writing out there somewhere. ♠ i drew some golden eyes and i figured i would share as you have seen fit to share such a wonderful story, the product of an amazing imagination: kokoronagomu.deviantart.com/art/hitokiri-battousai-100327546 ♥ thank you, ginny
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Title: I think it's great!
Reviewed By: eight_heavens [MediaMiner Member] On: October 27, 2004 02:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You're a good writer and you've inspired me in my writing. I've written about 20 fanfic stories so far and I still suck. ^_^ Instead of nit-picking, I look at the whole of the story ~ how engaged I was, the flow, the ideas and characterization, and I really like this story. I'm looking forward to reading more, which is rare when I'm out reading fanfiction. I hope your original work goes well! Arigato! ^_^ P.S. Be aware of people who will say rotten things to you out of jealousy. They're definitely out there!
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Title: Wahhhh!!
Reviewed By: Not Telling On: August 06, 2004 13:18 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Omg!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! That was so beautiful!!!! I think I've read this about 10 times and it still makes me cry!!!!!!!!!!!!! Write a sequal! Please!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Title: "A New Light" Review
Reviewed By: RavenTears On: December 27, 2003 12:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
After wandering the internet in search of decent RK fics, I came to MediaMiner and found "A New Light." At first, I was worried by the fact that you said you had never before written fanfiction, but I went ahead and read it anyway and was pleasantly surprisec by the quality of writing and the justice done to the original RK as well as Japanese culture. It's those little thngs that make reading enjoyable. My only complaint is the over-use of japanese in the dialogue. I understand and approve of the use of the original Japanese when a translation will not do or simply does not exist(IE - "oro"), but things that can be translated should be (IE - "aishiteru," "sesshin," & "arigatou").
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Reviewed By: XD On: September 29, 2003 18:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
It is a very good fanfic, for the nine months of pregenency between Kenshin and Kaoru, and all of the Kenshingumi. I can't give 10s, I haven't rated a fanfic before, but it's rather appealing and funny to read at times. Sometimes, I think childbirth would be the most painful thing ever... Good job!
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Reviewed By: slim On: July 22, 2003 22:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
that was so beautiful that i actualy started to cry. im not the type to cry so you should be proud of yourself 4 making such a great story. |
Reviewed By: lizzie On: July 18, 2003 20:46 CDT
Comment/Review:
This story was one of the first RK fanfics that I was fortunate enough to read on FF.net. I must say that your stories together with Tae's aka as Yumi Komagata got me hooked on RK fanfic. Thus, it was a great surprise to see this story posted . I loved every chapter of the fic and I am quite disappointed that you have decided to discontinue writting. I was looking forward to reading the continuation of the sequel to "The Giant and the Lion". (I am not quite sure if I got the title right, but I hope you know what I am referring to hehehehe) It is very rare to get the previledge to read quality RK fanfics now a days, which is very, very SAD!!!!! So, I would like to thank you for sharing this story once more, take care!!!! |
Reviewed By: Branwen Aisling On: July 16, 2003 23:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Style of Writing- Your style is quite good. It is easy to read and understand; yet it seems a tad overly so. There seems to be little foreshadowing in your writing and you answer the major questions in the beginning of each chapter leaving little room for you to maneuver towards the end. That being said, I was completely amazed by your obvious talent for descriptive passages. It makes the writing flow so beautifully. So much so that the previous things mentioned really don't matter as much.
Spelling and Grammar - It is enjoyable to read a story with a varied sentence structure as yours, but remember simple sentences are alright as well. Very impressive spelling.
Originality/ Creativity- Even though it is a story line done to death, you manage to bring realism to pregnancy, birthing a child, and the arguments married couples eventually encounter. The ability to weave in personal experiences into one's work, make a fan-fiction so much more enjoyable...Which leads to topic number four
Enjoyment Factor- As I was saying, the integration of experiences that are personal really enhances the overall feel for a story.
Overall Rating- Overall, the work is crafted well and has a good rhythm of movement in the character development department. Your use of Kenshin's double nature (the Battousai) as an enhancement to better understand the emotions Kenshin experienced, instead of a character flaw is really refreshing. Great job and I hope to see more from you in the future. |
Reviewed By: AoiTsuki [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2003 21:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
nice story, keep up the good writing |
Reviewed By: warnerbros123 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 02, 2003 21:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is a really nice fan fiction i really enjoyed it! |
Reviewed By: Aya On: May 15, 2003 16:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a very lovely fic to breach the gap between the end of the tv series and the Seisouhen oav. I love the realism you're bringing into it, especially since you're drawing from your own experiences with pregnancy and childbirth. Without being gory or overly romanticizing it, the birth of their child is beautifully written. The character interactions are great and you have managed to capture the essence of the family that they are.
Just a few observations/suggestions:
Kaoru's name is spelled "Kaoru". (Chapters 1 & 2 spell it as "Karou" and the rest of the chapters fluxuate)
If you're having Kenshin use the Japanese term of "beloved", it is spelled "koishii", not "kioshii".
In Ch. 2, there was one line where Kenshin calls Kaoru "Miss Kaoru" instead of "Kaoru dono", which he's being doing up to, and for a while after that part. Not sure if you meant it that way. Also, as expressed in Seisouhen, Kenshin continues to address Kaoru as "Kaoru dono" even years after their marriage.
In Ch.3, Megumi also calls Kaoru "Miss Kaoru". Megumi addresses Kaoru in 3 ways only: "Kaoru-chan", "Kaoru", and "tanuki musume" (raccoon girl).
I was just curious as to the type of wedding ceremony you ended up having them perform in Ch. 6. It doesn't sound like the traditional Japanese/Shinto wedding as they would have been sitting in senzu style and all their close friends would be invited to watch. Did they go through a civil ceremony such as in the western style, and if so, was it offered back then? I don't know if they had that set up and available yet.
I look forward to more chapters. :) |
Reviewed By: Kachie-chan On: June 16, 2003 14:12 CDT
Comment/Review:
That was good! I do have one question - why is it rated R? There wasn't anything in my opinion that would make it R. [shrug] I hope you write more stories. |
Reviewed By: Evie [MediaMiner Member] On: January 10, 2003 13:30 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
THey say that as soon as a woman gives birth there's a chemical in her body that starts to erase most of her memory of the pain in the experience... Or something like that.
Yeah, I liked this story too. |
Reviewed By: Evie [MediaMiner Member] On: January 10, 2003 13:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
THey say that as soon as a woman gives birth there's a chemical in her body that starts to erase most of her memory of the pain in the experience... Or something like that.
Yeah, I liked this story too. |
Reviewed By: Aisuru On: November 19, 2002 12:56 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed reading this story. You brought out a lot about the characters by putting them in this situation. |
Reviewed By: Ane S. Thesia On: September 26, 2002 06:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have officially made me cry. Good job. ^_^ *sniffles* What a beautiful fic you've written. |
Reviewed By: niekitta On: August 28, 2002 17:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's really good keep up the good work. I hope to see more fanfics like this one. |
Reviewed By: Lyle Fitzgerald [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2002 22:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Overall this was an enjoyable read, if decidedly generic (the beginning was slow for me.) Once you've evolved past a few minor cliches, your writing will be an absolute pleasure. I loved some of your illiterations. Keep up the good work!
P.S. Read my fan fic PLEASE, I'm new! |
Reviewed By: eileenytheloony [MediaMiner Member] On: July 01, 2002 16:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yes! I guessed right! Ahhhh.......that was a good story.... |
Reviewed By: Steve On: April 22, 2002 11:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh yeh you can email me your answer at zachw87@aol.com
Later |
Reviewed By: Steve On: April 22, 2002 11:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked this fan fic it is the best by far i have ever read. I was wondering if i could print it off so i could read it at home. |
Reviewed By: Milocax On: February 07, 2002 08:02 CST
Comment/Review:
Well, I just love it!!! and I want to know what is going to happen?!?!?!?!?! Please do continue the fanfic....^_^ |
Reviewed By: Umi-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 03, 2002 17:17 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Straight 10's! Seems a tad unrealistic (the 10's I mean), but oh well. I'm in a 10-giving mood. Especially after reading this.
I for one don't mind the "slight altercations"! I really hope you continue. Then again, I still have three chapters up for me to read! |
Reviewed By: digibitch [MediaMiner Member] On: December 30, 2001 13:01 CST
Comment/Review:
Being your beta-reader, it would be sorta wrong for me to rate. However, I need more! You are just getting to the good parts! I hope you decide to continue this fic! |
Reviewed By: DFourthHorseman [MediaMiner Member] On: June 24, 2002 13:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story, how it contained a lil of everything, though I wish there was a lil more humour in it. Great job. |
