| "Reason vs feelings" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Reviewed By: tammyzora [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2006 02:00 CST
Comment/Review:
I'm really hoping you update soon! I love where this is going.
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Reviewed By: Majin_Broly [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2005 07:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well your improving with your writing, but as bluedragon said your grammar and spelling needs just a little work. Keep on writing.
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Title: nice...
Reviewed By: blue dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2005 07:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey there, I just stumbled upon this story as I was browsing through the fanfics. I like it :) it has an original storyline and your style of writing is good. I also read your note about the grammar mistakes in your story, I'd advise you to find a beta-reader who can help you with the grammar and spelling of your story. All in all, your story definitely has potential, it's brewing up to be quite someting! ^__^ Keep up the good work! BD.
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Reviewed By: Mely On: June 26, 2005 16:14 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very Good!I can't wait to see what happens when they are married.
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Reviewed By: SetosAngel On: June 15, 2005 08:18 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
i can't wait to read more! im glad that bulma loves yamcha too. im not a big fan of the v/b pairing. (vegeta should be mine
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Title: PU,HA,HA,HA
Reviewed By: Majin_Broly [MediaMiner Member] On: June 13, 2005 11:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
That's a first for me..... no one has ever really thanked me like that but I still review for a reason. Main points too make is too always hold feelings for characters, let them see the true depths of comparison between them and their feelings around the conflict. You try and hold Bulma's .... apprehesion might be a little out of line but thats all im getting right now. Well anyway your getting more depth but you still lack some general expressions that characters have. ( If am confusing you e-mail me i'll explain more, I tend too do that.) Well thats all I got too say. Need any help im hear for yah. P.S. check out some of my own stories for some thoughts and descriptions if you need be. (V)ajin_Broly
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Reviewed By: Mely On: June 01, 2005 21:10 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story! Very interesting. I hope you update soon.
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Title: not bad....
Reviewed By: Majin_Broly [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2005 07:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's not a bad start.... although the chapters could be longer, but you need too put more prospective into how bad this situation is as well as more personality into the characters. But other than that not a bad start just dont drop the story because of reviews because people will keep reading. Like my own stories not everyone reviews but they enjoy it.
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