| "The MSTing Torture" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Title: FFRG Review - chapter 3
Reviewed By: LadyLark [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2005 21:15 CST
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The MST is one of the better ones I have read. However it can still use a little work. I feel that your opening scene when Julie finds Casey masturbating needs a little more lead in. It seems to come out of nowhere. I think that the sarcastic commentary is very well done and humorous. You have some problems with commas and a few spelling issues -- they are real words just the wrong word. "Then" instead of "Them" for example. Reading aloud your fic may help with that and a good beta will as well. All in all this is nice little MST of a disturbing lemon. Thanks for submitting to FFRG.
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Title: FFARG Review!
Reviewed By: Nekotsuki [MediaMiner Member] On: July 18, 2005 07:15 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hello! Your request for FFARGing does not have a specific chapter requested, and hence I'm only reviewing your prologue at this point. I'm amused by the concept of MSTing such a colourful topic ^^ Given that this is written in scripting format and is a copy of what you've done with your friends, I can't really comment on anything like characterisation, etc - so what I have to say might not actually be of any help. Spelling/grammar wise, I noted a few errors in the former, and with grammar you occasionally use the wrong punctuation mark to end the sentence. (For example: "What!!!!" Should be "What?" Or even "What!?" given this is casual style...) The "WHAM!" that you have in there should probably have a line all its own, otherwise some people might think that Casey did, in fact, say "Enjoya..WHAM!", heh. Apart from that, amusing, and now I'm going to peer at the other chapters out of sheer curiosity... good luck with the rest!
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Reviewed By: devildice708 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2005 05:48 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not really a big fan of MSTs but this one busted a few guts and I enjoyed it.
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Reviewed By: Shadow-King [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2005 03:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
lolfunny but needs longer chapters. please update soon. ^_^
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Reviewed By: Formerly Glenn On: June 06, 2005 22:48 CDT
Comment/Review:
Mystery Science Theatre? I'm actually looking forward to it. Here's to when much hilarity ensues. Cheers.
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Title: WTF!?
Reviewed By: NLD2000 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2005 18:09 CDT
Comment/Review:
Might I say this is quite funny, but, and please do respond, WHAT THE HELL DOES IT MEAN TO MST LEMONS!!!!!????? WHAT DOES MST MEAN!!!!????
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