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Reviewed By: dana_san [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2005 23:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Interesting and mysterious - bizarre! Neat concept, neat conclusion - unexpected actually. I guess Ryoga was too clueless to be given a choice, which surprised me pleasantly.
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Reviewed By: BallPoint On: September 04, 2005 07:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
I hate reading mystery stories, so I just skipped to the end (read chapter 1 and 8). Still, I enjoyed your story and I'm looking forward to reading your next work.
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Reviewed By: darkwoofe [MediaMiner Member] On: September 03, 2005 22:13 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thanks for the interesting read. I really enjoyed this story and hope that you do decide to write a sequel. I hated to see it end, but as endings go, this one was pretty good. Til next time.
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Reviewed By: darkwoofe [MediaMiner Member] On: August 11, 2005 17:46 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is so cool! I can't wait to see more.
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Title: wow
Reviewed By: Hurricane_tiger@hotmail.com On: August 04, 2005 16:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
JEEEZ! So that means nabiki never existed? Then what was his basis for picking her? I understand ....I think. But its just sad if theres no Nabiki. Maybe Ranma And Nabiki will be seperated by the antidote. And Nabiki will say "I felt this would help you understand me." Its awesome. I get it. But I dont like Nabiki not being real.
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Title: Okay. That was tricky.
Reviewed By: jesdynf On: July 27, 2005 20:19 CDT
Comment/Review:
I rarely see tricky temporal loops explained so concisely. You've done very well.
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Reviewed By: anonim1979 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2005 14:20 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good plot, good writing style, no errors, no stupid logic, no bashing, no OOC,etc. Very good.I hope for more stories from you.
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Reviewed By: archphoenix [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2005 01:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You know, in the beginning I really didn't know what to say. But this last chapter (I do hope it's not THE last one for this story) explained everything. THe idea is brilliant and so is the realisation. I like twists like this... The only question now is ... what will happen when Ranma/Nabiki return to his true form... what of Nabiki? Can't wait to read the next chapter!
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Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Pahhur [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2005 23:37 CDT
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This is fairly good, and has a definate sense of plot. You do seem to know where you are going with this story, which is always good. Your writing style is reader-pleasing, which is also plus. However, what you might want to do now is flesh it out more. Perhaps show more of what is going on that just what relates to Nabiki. It will give the reader a bigger picture to look at.
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Reviewed By: Last Knight Thomas [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2005 23:59 CDT
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Nice story! I like your writing style- Its casual, and easy to read. Interesting story, too. Its a nice twist to Nabiki's character to find out that she's not truly supporting the family. It makes her... Well, actually, I think it makes me a bit less sympathetic to ger cause. Still, this fanfic's interesting. I can't beleive she figured out Ryoga! ...Then again, that isn't exactly hard. Bah, I'm babbling. Nice story. Your first chapter doesn't really meld very well with the rest of the fic, though... maybe you should combine it with chapter 2? Just a thought. Other than that, congrats on writing a good, easy to understand, entertaining story.
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Reviewed By: Innortal [MediaMiner Member] On: June 17, 2005 17:41 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I must say you are drawing out the tnsion quite well. I look forward to seeing what you have happen next. Innortal
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Reviewed By: archphoenix [MediaMiner Member] On: June 17, 2005 02:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
That's quite intriguing... What the hell is she doing with money?!?!?! Pls, update sooner
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Reviewed By: Lerris On: June 17, 2005 00:41 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is good so far, but the reason is still unclear. I guess we shall have to wait and see.
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Title: FFARG Ch1
Reviewed By: Sidhe (Sisi) On: June 16, 2005 16:03 CDT
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In your first paragraph you could have a slight description of who was at the window before you said Ranma. But you don't *really* need to put it in there. When Ranma says: "It's obvious, isn't it?" Those two paragraphs should either be one paragraph or you need to add in something like "He fidgeted or he nervously scratched the side of his face." I love how Nabiki handled that. It was done very well. Overall you have excellent grammar and wonderful wording. It's a very good story but if you perhaps described more on 'what' had happened at the wedding to begin with it wouldn't come as such a surprise that Nabiki had sabotaged it. I enjoyed this.
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Reviewed By: Innortal [MediaMiner Member] On: June 02, 2005 01:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well done, a nice approach. Keep writing. Innortal
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