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| "The Dance" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: a PlanetGarth.com member On: July 16, 2005 21:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
My deepest sympathy for the passing of your grandfather. I liked this story. Prayers for ya'll. God and peace, Vanessa :)
| Reviewed By: Nita-sama [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2005 18:04 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey! I read this already! Can't remember where but I did. This is a great story and I could read it over and over again.
| Title: FFARG review
Reviewed By: Tinkerbell Jepardy [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2005 20:55 CDT
Comment/Review:
In reviewing of your fanfic 'The Dance' I was able to clearly see a new spin placed on a familiar idea that a lot have writers try, the death-fic in other words. You have given it a fresh and interesting twist and shown an entirely new light on it. The addition of a song that is generally perceived as a love song but is again used in an entirely new light is also a fresh idea that I truly enjoyed. One of the first things I noticed though was that it feels rushed. There is a lot more detail that could have been used to further bring out your ideas and feelings on this. Also it seems very generic in nature. You never even designate a name to your speaker, and while most people familiar with Gundam Wing will be able to make the assumption that it is Heero, due to the Relena comments, not everyone will be able to see that. And other then the mention of Relena's name, this fic is almost generic enough to be used for any fandom. Its clear that you knew exactly where you wanted to go with this fic, and were able to bring it to that point, but the addition of details and even names, could help to make it feel less rushed, less generic and more like it does take place in the Gundam Wing universe.
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