"The Lake" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: Tawny-chan On: June 10, 2005 17:20 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: (My last review got eaten off for some reason... so I'm reposting it... v.v) Oh, my. My, my, my. How did I KNOW this was a Kurama/Hiei/Yusuke? *___* I looooved this. So brilliant. Normally, the fics that I see with this threesome have Yusuke be the one that's struggling with his feelings, knowing that the other two are buggering like rabbits behind his back, but Hiei as both the dominant and the submissive? In one fic. *standing ovation* "Your lips are getting swollen and redder. Your cheeks are becoming flush. The skin on your neck is prickling, waiting to be touched..." That line. Bloody brilliant. I was literally staring at the computer like 'Ooooooh. Seductive Kura-kun...' The writing in this fic is absolutely superb, though there were a few terms in there that made me cringe a bit... Hentai's very hard to write (I know... v.v), and it really takes a lot of work to figure out what sounds really great and what sounds... er... weird? Well, that didn't happen much, at any rate, but, like I said, some things seemed a bit awkward... And I don't know why, but the word 'manhood' knocks me out of a story like a semi truck. It's fine, though - everything else was so great that I forgot about it until just now. ^__^ Blah. This got long, and I only have about 300 characters left... xD Figured I'd leave you with something a bit more comprehensive than 'EEEEE! Kurama/Hiei/Yusuke ROX MY PURPLE SOXXX!!!!eleven!!11' You deserve better than that. ^_^
| Reviewed By: Tawny-chan On: June 10, 2005 17:16 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: Oh, my. My, my, my. How did I KNOW this was a Kurama/Hiei/Yusuke? *___* I looooved this. So brilliant. Normally, the fics that I see with this threesome have Yusuke be the one that's struggling with his feelings, knowing that the other two are buggering like rabbits behind his back, but Hiei as both the dominant and the submissive? In one fic. *standing ovation* "Your lips are getting swollen and redder. Your cheeks are becoming flush. The skin on your neck is prickling, waiting to be touched..."
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