Title: FFRG (Prologue)
Reviewed By: SnowyBlackOwl [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2005 00:19 CDT
Comment/Review:
(First of all, it would be easier if it were double-spaced. It would be easier to see that way.) Through the prologue, I sort-of barely noticed any grammatical errors. However, near the end, I spotted one. "Here" in "He'd never even met here" is supposed to be a "her," positive as I am that it implies to Cordelia Chase. The another was spotted before that one: "in actuality upside down." I haven't heard of the word "actuality" before, and I'm guessing it is supposedly "actually." Other than that, I have nothing else to say. It was... a grand read, and I hope to see the upcoming first chapter. Thank you for submitting it to FFRG. I have had a great pleasure reviewing it.
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