| "The Hime Beast" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Reviewed By: OrlandoLover [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2006 11:04 CDT
Comment/Review:
nice fic...update soon...SAVE THE EARTH IT'S THE ONLY PLANET WITH CHOCOLATE...Cheers
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Title: The Hime Beast
Reviewed By: raven rocks [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2005 13:50 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm sorry I meant story! Not review!
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Title: The Hime Beast
Reviewed By: raven rocks [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2005 13:48 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It is wonderful! Please update soon! I am soory I cannot write such a long review as MissMusicality ( sp? ) But I still think your review is absolutly scrumptious! Please update!
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Reviewed By: Radish [MediaMiner Member] On: June 17, 2005 03:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
This is a creative idea, and you seem to have the talent to make it work. Eagerly awaiting next chapter.
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Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: MissMusicality [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2005 11:54 CDT
Comment/Review:
Thanks for submitting your fic to FFARG! We only do one chapter review at a time, so I did the first prologue, since you didn't specify. You can submit your other chapters one at a time, if you like! You have a great story lined up here. The plot has begun, and I'm interested to see it all play out. You changed the Beauty and the Beast story to fit your needs nicely, and introduced all your characters and the curse creatively. Excellent job! Be careful with the overuse of punctuation. For example: "She knew that it was not proper for a woman to go into battle; so she asked it of Lord Sesshoumaru would go in her stead." This sentence would flow better with a comma rather than a semi-colon. Also, the bit about Tsubaki and the battle confused me some. The transition from Kagome asking Sesshoumaru to battle for her, to the battle...it was vague. I don't understand how, exactly, it was part of Naraku's plan, nor how Tsubaki was a pawn. Some clarification would be nice, so I get a better understanding of how the battle played out. Other than that, your first prologue sets up the story very well. Thanks again for submitting!
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