Title: idea 4 next chappie
Reviewed By: sweettalkerAlisha On: June 17, 2005 22:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
love your story so far. i have an idea 4 your next chappie you dont have to use it but if you want you can . when sango go back home she should pack up her clothes .but sess is trying to explain what happen. sango just laughs in his face and says that she tried of being threated like shit. so she takin a little trip.but really she goin to inuyasha house for a couple of weeks.she doesnt tell sess that part. sess is just stunned .he tought that she was leaving him. so sango goes to tell her children that she goin on a trip. sango comes back a hold different person. her look was changed too she has a pink mini skirt on,her shirt is black that says *DONT MESS WITH ME*. she walked right passed a shocked sess . she hugged he kids and took rin shoppin . it was night time when they came back. after rin went to bed .sess asked if sango was goin to sleep.she said yeah, she turned and walked for the front door. sess said to sango,i thought you said you were headin to bed.sango drop her keys and sess put them up and handed them to her she took them but sess caught her hand before she could pulled her hand away now they are holdin hands. do u forgive me sess asked sango after that was said she pulled her hand away (with keys in them). she turn so her back was facing sess and said no sess i dont forgive, im sleepin over inuyasha house "again" she said while walkin thouth the door. thats all , you can do anything to my idea i think it would b great 4 your story it well spice things up more
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