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| "Pressing Matters" Reviews/Comments [ 18 ] | | Pages (2): [ « ‹ 1 2 ] | Title: Review Chapter One
Reviewed By: Kin-chan Pandun [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2005 23:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. This is really good. I was confused on the earthquake part. You said it was happenning in Makai or something, but Koenma and the vaults are in Reikai. Did the Shikon turn Kagome's world into the YYH universe? How are Hiei and Kagome related to each other? That part still doesn't make sense. Is Kagome Hiei's "light"? I absolutely love how you made Shippou the trickster god. Tell me, havve you by any chance read Par Tout Autre Nom (previously By Any Other Name)? The whole "god" thing reminded me of that. Also: Isn't Koenma a god himself sort of, seeing as he is prince of the spirit world? I'm still confused about the earthquake, as in: Why'd it happen? There was one sentence in there, in which you had a word that totally confused me. It was this one: >>>>>>>> Botan inquired from behind the shelter of her irion-like oar
| Reviewed By: inuyasha92689 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2005 20:36 CDT
Comment/Review:
OMG I love this story sooooooo much and i cant wait to see what happends next so you hvae got to update it really soon ok thanks tootles. ~Ris~
| Reviewed By: juana-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 13, 2005 13:02 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really like your story! It has a good plot! Keep it up!
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