Title: FFRG (One-Shot)
Reviewed By: SnowyBlackOwl [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2005 21:28 CDT
Comment/Review:
Looking back at Inu Yasha, I must say that you've kept Naraku's character quite in tact. There is only one mistake that I've noticed, however. On paragraph 9, there is a mistake that is needed to be corrected: a lowercase 'u' for 'undead.' You've managed to capture Naraku's true personality without having him out of character, and the balance that you put, mentioning all main Naraku-related characters as you possibly could: Kikyou, Sango, Kagura, Inu Yasha, Sesshoumaru, Kagome, and mentioning even small characters like Shippou and Kirara. I believe that you've achieved quite a lot with this, Custodian of Dreams, and I personally wish to see more of you. Thank you for submitting this to the FFRG.
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