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| "Sorrow" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] | Title: It's not your fault....
Reviewed By: KuroHoshi On: October 07, 2009 05:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Granted, I liked your "Freudian Slip' better, but that's probably because I'm more of a Bleach fan.I personally think that NekoVixen shouldn't have flamed you; it was pretty unfair. You aren't too bad and you should NEVER let anyone make you believe that. Just keep trying! You've got a lot of potential. And who says no one wants to read an angsty fic with a happy ending? Why on earth would someone intentionally torture such beautiful characters by destroying the happiness they deserve? Everyone deserves a second chance. As long you believe it, happy endings do exist. Let me tell you about myself. I won't go into the details; it's too long and complicated. But sometime when I was 15, I became simply tired of the world. I had been angry; hating everything and everyone -including myself- for 4 years. I didn't want the tears; the voices in my head; the pain; the absolutely awful, heavy sense of wothlessness constantly hanging around me;not anymore...even if i believed then I deserved it. I wanted it all to end; damn if I was going to Hell for it. So I threw myself off the deep end of a swimming pool one day. Just like that; in the middle of a bright, beautiful summer's day I couldn't see or enjoy; the way i hadn't for years. There was no letter, no goodbyes; no one I cared for enough to explain myself to. They'd think I was a liar, or that I wanted some attention to myself. Unfortunately; or fortunately, i survived. Of course; I got shit for it, but somehow it woke up the anger and fight in me. I wanted to live; wanted to be happy and glowing; if only as a way to get my revenge on those who abandoned me. So I did. And here's the really amazing and terrible thing about life: nothing lasts forever.Nothing, however beautiful or horrifying, is destined for eternity. They crumble away slowly under the mediocre efforts to preserve them; even the memories go dull after a while.Which was just as well for me, because the darkness inside went pretty much the same way. The voices, the hallucinations, the dreams; they're all gone; and the angry died with them. Now I'm ...content; if not fully happy as I'd intended to be. Some part of me will always be tied down to my past; soft and scarred; but I'm going to make the best of it. The urges still hit me sometimes; it's a difficult habit to throw. Then there's hope. Whichever it'll be is up to you to choose. Just remember this: someone out there believes in you. Even if I don't know who you are, I still want to hug you, to smile and cheer for you. Don't give up now.
| Reviewed By: naru-chanismyhomeboy On: October 04, 2007 22:01 CDT
Comment/Review:
zomg wtf. i cant believe somebody would say this. ive read this fic twice (once was a long time ago) and i really like it. not so much the last chapter... but i still like it alot. that mom-efer stick it where the sun dont shine. you are a really good writer. plus im really into naru angst. ..; ok ive put it my two bits. lataz
| Title: What'd she say?? >..
Reviewed By: Zirra Nova [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2007 13:55 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a wonderful fic, and some people need to remove the stick from their anal regions. Your writting is well done, and I find the reasoning plausible, for all we know Naruto could have issues like this. I know I would if My life was like his. *shudders* I'm glad it's not, and I give him(even if he is fictional) all my support. ^..^ Now I go to check out any other fics or ficlets you've posted.. Ja Ne, Zirra ^..^
| Reviewed By: blondebrat2006 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2006 22:35 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this story was just absolutly amazing!! im a big fan of sasunaru. i really lyked the part where sasuke told naruto how he felt. it was really sweet. keep up the good work.
| Reviewed By: xxdedxx On: July 15, 2005 13:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed it. Your characters are a little OOC but not unbearably so and it seemed a bit hurried. It didn't really develope the relationship between the boys but i liked how the fic didn't end in Naruto dying. Those fics hurt my feelings. And as for the message your fic sent, it's good that you feel that way. I myself am suicidal, currently on medication. It is good your letting everyone know how you feel about it, suicide is a very serious problem and painful not just for the dead. All in all i really enjoyed the fic and think you did a wonderful job, i was crying throughout the whole thing. Keep up the good work.
| Reviewed By: Deb-chan On: June 24, 2005 05:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked your story and found it to be a very realistic portrayal of life and sorrow. The first reviewer is a fool if he or she cannot see how creative you are. You should not have let the first reviewer make you feel so bad. A fanfic is just what it's called "a fanfic," and you change the story around anyway you want to. You're not trying to sell it off as the real thing, you're just showing your appreciation through a creative means. If the reviewer wanted something based solely on the plot of Naruto, he or she should watch the anime or read the manga. Don't wory about stupid people, just keep doing what you do best and know that there are people that truly enjoyed your fanfic and would be sad if your took it off the site.
| Reviewed By: Nejidragon On: June 19, 2005 22:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story. Don't listen to retarded flamers. If they don't like it, they don't have to read it. They're just looking for someone to put down so they can make themselves feel better. If he actualy took the time to read your story, then he was only looking for something to bitch about. Ignore him and continue writing. You can't please everyone with your writing, and I can tell you that I've seen MUCH worse fanfics. Don't stop writing a story you like jsut because one whiny brat decided he needed to flame you. Keep up the awesome writing, and I can't wait until you write more!
| Reviewed By: nightbloom [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2005 22:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Never apologize for your writing unless it's for grammatical errors and you know it. That first review sucked because reviews are meant for constructive criticism. There were parts of the dialogue that seemed fake, or too rushed. The narrative portion flowed okay. I think if you took a bit more time and expanded it, it might work out better. The sudden appearance of the other characters and their verbal reaction just don't strengthen the story as much as they could. An inside look to how they would have coped with such a situation would make it more powerful, I think. Or maybe it's just the style. I know my style changes from very descriptive to very simple, depending on the mood you want to create.
| Reviewed By: Sabaku no Rae On: June 17, 2005 22:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't think you should have to apologize. I really liked this story; it made me happy. Reading suicide fics with unhappy endings makes me sad. I'm not a fan of character death in fics. Plus, it was actually very well written and edited in my opinion. It's not like this is the only Naruto cutting/suicide fic there is out there. I've seen plently and I can tell you I enjoy reading the ones like yours, with happy endings, than the alternative. Writing fanfiction is about taking certain liberties with existing characters and I've read fics that were way farther off base from the original prduct than this one. You're simply interpreting the character a different way and that's fine. Especially since it was backed up by a plausable explanation. In my opinion, this fic was pretty good and it's cool the way you kind of wrote it in the memory of your friend. Try not to be so hard on yourself because of one bad review. Some people just enjoy being bitchy. There's nothing I find offensive about this fic and I would be sad if you took it down. I hope you write some of those one shots and the sequel you were talking about in the last chapter. I think I would enjoy reading them. ^_^
| Reviewed By: Nekovixen On: June 17, 2005 09:56 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
For the record. You're story sucks. Why? Because you're shitting on Kishimoto's hard work into developing a character as great as Naruto. If you're going to write a fanfic, write a decent one at least.
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