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| "A Weekend Retreat" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: Serenitychan13 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2007 19:56 CST
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That was SO cute! I liked the "and you're wet" and the rather Warner Brothers-esque exchange between Bikky and Carol in the end!
| Reviewed By: BakaYasha [MediaMiner Member] On: October 15, 2005 03:18 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aww! That was so cute and It was harmless R: Unlike someone we know.. D: What is that supposed to mean?! R: Oh sure! now that there R people here you start playing the saint! D:How dare you accuse me of such a thing!? I wouldn't hesitate to jump you right now and I couldn't care less who saw! R: See my point people (sigh) D: (Blink nervous laughter) Anyway that was really good.I loved the ending with Carol and Bikky! C: I told you it was a good idea Bikky! B: Uhu. I'm just glad that she decided to end it before Dee did something horrible to Ryu like...well I don't even want to think about it. C: Aww Bikky you're such a prude! They love each other! D: (faces us) You were all witness to that. R: You're pathetic, you know that right? D: Indeed I do! Anything to make you fall for me! B: See what I mean!! It's disgusting. Dee's such a pig. D: Oh go throw your own crap at something you house ape! C: moron. B: Me? C: No. Dee. D:I resent that comment. i happened to get a very high score on my...my..well, that big test you take at the end of Police Academy! B: You said it.What an idiot. R: (thinks) (sigh) It's like they just forget I'm here sometimes. D: and another thing... R: (leans & kisses Dee) D: (silent) C: That was the most incredible thing I've ever seen in my life. B: Me too. R:(blush)Well it shut him up didn't it? Us: (laughing hysterically at all of this and wondering just how this has anything to do with the review I started to leave)
| Reviewed By: Takara On: August 11, 2005 03:54 CDT
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That was really cute. Especially the little ending dialogue between Bikky and Carol. You did a great job on this, but I have one correction to state. The name is spelt Ryo not Riyo. But other than that, I didn't really catch any major errors. This would be even better if you perhaps, added onto it or something. Its good on its own, but would be better if it was longer and had more plot.
| Reviewed By: Ryua (not logged in) On: June 25, 2005 16:01 CDT
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Well that was fun! You've got a real gift for writing, you know. You should try and track down someone making a volume of short stories, get them published... Not to say that I want you to stop doing online, of course. I'd suffer from withdrawl...
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