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| "Purgatory" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Title: Apologies, mistake
Reviewed By: MissMusicality [MediaMiner Member] On: September 27, 2005 13:47 CDT
Comment/Review:
My apologies, in my review I said that you didn't mention a chapter. HA! You did. Sorry about that. Either way, it was a joy to read, and wouldn't have stopped at the first chapter anyway. Also, even if I read the whole piece, I only left specific advise for the first chapter, and you only submitted the first chapter for review. Therefore, you should feel very free to submit your other chapters one at a time each week! I encourage it, in fact, as others will spot things that I have not. Great job!
| Title: FFARG review
Reviewed By: MissMusicality [MediaMiner Member] On: September 27, 2005 13:42 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hello, and thanks for submitting this fic to be reviewed! You have an excellent storyline going here. You have great characterizations, excellent descriptions, and a well-developed plot. You didn't mention a specific chapter to review, and I was going to just do the first one like I normally do, but it was so intriguing that I read the whole thing. I was curious as to why the first paragraphs of each chapter were in large print, and was thrown by it a bit. There are a few very minor diction mistakes, but other than that I can see no glaring flaws. I do have one suggestion, though. When switching between their two viewpoints in the first chapter, it would be helpful to divide up the sections a bit, so that it is obvious that you are switching perspectives. Other than that, great work, and best of luck with the rest of your story!
| Reviewed By: tongari lover On: June 26, 2005 23:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow--this rules. where are you going?! i want to see what happens next! really intriguing storyline.
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