| "Protector of Innocence" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Title: good, but with a disclaimer problem
Reviewed By: cair On: June 04, 2004 10:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This sounds incredibly similar to a book which was written in the 1980's, known as Alanna: The First Adventure.
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Reviewed By: Anorexic Chibi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 03, 2002 17:42 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've read only the prologue, and I might say that it really didn't seem like a prologue. Maybe you should change it so that it is just chapter 1.
Your writing style is choppy and confusing, and your grammar was poor, especially with changing tenses and awkward sentences. The fact that almost the same thing has been done multiple times doesn't help much.
Hey, but work on it. You might get better, you might not, but you might as well try. |
Reviewed By: Rei the Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2002 23:16 CST
Comment/Review:
Cmon! Write more! This is getting good! PPLLLEEAASSEEE?
-ReiAkagi |
Reviewed By: sorato [MediaMiner Member] On: December 24, 2001 16:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love sorato fics and I can't find much here so i'm glad you made one. Keep up the good work and try to make the next chapter! Thanks! |
