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Reviewed By: InusGurl4 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 13, 2007 20:17 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
one question: is the 'secret lover' Inuyasha? Somehow...by a magically intricate and complicated plot twist? no? Well it should be. ;P Ah well. pretty good!
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Reviewed By: Precious [MediaMiner Member] On: January 03, 2007 12:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well the idea/plot for this story is nice but it could be so much more. I think you should go back and shine this up a bit. Make the scenes less choppy, fix the mechanic errors, add a little detail. Like how does Inuyasha's pent house look? How big is Kagome's dorm room? Why does Sango give Kagome flack about sleeping around and not Inuyasha? How do Sango and Miroku know that Inuyasha likes Kagome? Why does Kagome like this club? Does she get a rush from it or does she not like the akwardness of creeping out of someone's bed? See just a few of the questions that you can clear up to make your story better. I know its just a one-shot but that doesn't mean it has to be brief. Take it from someone who knows...I would critque your lemon but honestly it would be fine if you put a scene breaker on the first chapter. Not the best out there but I promise I have seen much, much worse. Plus lemons really are hard to write. Doing things like describing the club sceneary or the person's inner thoughts between the "action" of the sex parts usually help the lemons when you don't want to focus on the physical details that much. But as an over all I like this story but I really hope you clean it up to make it glow as it could.
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Reviewed By: nick names mouse On: July 31, 2006 01:34 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww
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Reviewed By: kagome313 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2006 17:45 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved this fic SO much!! I live for reading lemons, only when inu and kags are doing it together! This wuz really a wild lemon fic. GREAT JOB!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Inukag_obsession [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2006 16:13 CST
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heeey, I liked it, it was a fun thing to read. U watch blue seed dont u? (kusanagi) anyway, liked it a lot. Love, IK Obsession
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Title: Geez...I thought I reviewed this before!
Reviewed By: InuGrrrl [MediaMiner Member] On: October 26, 2005 03:49 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Freakin' awesome as always Sexy C. PLeeeeease update your other stories soon! I live for your lemons!!
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Reviewed By: ameera4eva [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2005 17:56 CDT
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I liked it. you write well.
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Reviewed By: jazzyca [MediaMiner Member] On: July 02, 2005 20:34 CDT
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good story, but seriously watch your grammar. it needs work. but the plot was good
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Title: ^.^ great
Reviewed By: Crystalmaiden87 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2005 19:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW i really loved this fanfic ^.^ very intrigued
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Title: great!!
Reviewed By: blackice3036 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2005 12:11 CDT
Comment/Review:
IT WAS AWESOME! THAT WAS A TWIST THAT IS WAS INUYASHA!! LOL GREAT JOB
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Reviewed By: Hentai_Chick [MediaMiner Member] On: June 23, 2005 15:20 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Kinky....^_~
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Reviewed By: Dark Angel Of Love [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2005 20:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you know that inuyasha is the guy in the room. update soon please!
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Reviewed By: Dark_Lady_69 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2005 13:02 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
her secret lover is inuyasha i just know it it has to be well i cant wait til ur next update
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Title: jeninuyashalover
Reviewed By: jeninuyashalover [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2005 09:42 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
look at that I'm the first to review, well hey i just wanted to say thanx for reviewing my one shot yea i think i need to work on my lemmons well just wanted to tell you i think this lemmon is awsome.
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