Title: Great...but a little awkward...
Reviewed By: Diabolik Affinity [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2005 10:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
i would like to congratualte you on making this fine piece of work...i have some things that i'd like to point out though that i found a little odd for GITS...First, Motoko never cries (not even if she's about to die). Second, Batou can't cry due to his cybernetic eyes. Third, i think it would have been better if you'd have written "MOTOKO!" instead of "MAJOR!" because Batou calls the major by her first name whenever he gets emotional or tries to get her attention... Lastly, the chapters were extremely short...so when you make the next chapter to this lovely story i hope you take the above into consideration...but all in all, it was a good story...
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