Reviewed By: noodlemonster [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2009 14:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
this might have been a great story except for two factors: grammar--it sucks, disregarding normal grammar mistakes, you keep bouncing between present and past tenses like a kid on speed. style--your writing style in itself needs a bit of work. stuff like: he pressed himself into the shadows, so as not to be seen. that kinda style of writing is for lil' kids
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