Reviewed By: Lady Macbeth [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2001 02:07 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is so classic Slayers! Though I prefer Lina teamed up with the Next/Try crew, the bit with Naga's laugh compared to Santa's was worth enduring the busty sorceress. ^_^;
I love the light, airy style of writing that so matches the Slayers style. It captured the drama of Lina finding her friend to be a ghost and the emotions that go with it without being overbearingly heavy for the series you're writing for. It also made for a fast-paced story arc, much like the Slayers movies.
I wouldn't worry to much about any "glaring grammer errors" or the like. ~_^ If there were any, they didn't have a real impact on the flow of the story; I didn't trip at all over any sentences and nothing jumped out as painfully obvious.
The story you came up with for this is a great Christmas tale, and it added to the Slayers atmosphere by making it a "Bear's Eve" celebration. I also liked the way Lina and Naga captured the ghost and released him without harm or misery to the next world.
I had a great time reading this fic. I'd be glad to read more like it; Slayers is always a fun, easy series to pick up any time of day, and you captured that essence in this fic. |
