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Reviewed By: Viandra [MediaMiner Member] On: December 18, 2005 17:36 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi there, I read all the Vegeta and Goku fics that you have placed here. I greatly enjoyed them. Your style on developing a story is very appealing. I like how you play with the emotions of our all time favourites Goku and Vegeta. Vegeta seems to be slightly out of character being that much interactive with Goku and others and showing so much emotions, but I really like that. He has always been my favourite character in the series, but I think I like him even better in your stories. I can perfectly understand why Goku is so possessive when it comes to him. I am looking forward to reading some more about that lovely couple. However, I`d recommend you go looking for some other beta reader, because all of your fictions are lacking of proper grammar and sentence construction. Your stories are so much fun, but they keep my hair standing on end when it comes to tenses and sentence construction. This somehow spoils the fun and it does not do credit to your obvious writing talent. So please keep on writing, practice a little grammar and you will become a tremendous author and noone will ever write such a critical review on you stories again. There will only be greatful readers complimenting on every chapter issued. In sum, thumbs up - keep going.
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Reviewed By: Princess Katreena On: December 14, 2005 21:37 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOL So there will be a hanging...namly Yamcha? LOL Grate chapter Up date soon And yes it dose give Vegeta his charm LadyKATT
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Title: Au-rit-auw-rit!
Reviewed By: dishgirl On: December 08, 2005 14:53 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another excelent chapter! ^_^ I gotta say my favorite prase in the whole thing was chi-chi saying to Veggie was "I have nightmares about your growls, glares and canines." p.s. as far as the poll.. i would have given you 15 out of 10 for the creativity... but the numbers don't go up that high.. L:
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Reviewed By: NewFan On: December 07, 2005 00:52 PST
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Seems like Yamcha is coming around, it's nice to see that he isn't being portrayed as a completely insensitive jerk like he is in a surprisingly large number of fanfics. I feel kinda bad for Chichi though, Vegeta still doesn't like her, but at least he's blunt and brutally honest about it. Like always, I find myself enjoying even the smallest things (hehe, Vegeta in Russia) so just in case I haven't said it enough times: great job! Hope you update soon.
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Title: ? 0_o ?
Reviewed By: dishgurl On: November 29, 2005 19:13 PST
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I gotta be honest with you... when I was reading the new chapter... I got confused while reading the part from Vegita's POV about Ahradmar. That part of the story got confusing so I skipped ahead... don't hate me, but I really got lost. I understand since I read the other two stories, but I just got lost when reading this one. sorry. On the other hand I did enjoy that you put Raditz in your story... ^_^ I love stories with Raditz too. ^_^ Who was his mate prior I wonder... If you make any more stories after you finish this one could you make one about Raditz and his life prior to his death by the hands of the Namek?
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Reviewed By: Princess Katreena On: November 29, 2005 18:09 PST
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Well that was very informative thank you, it nice Vegeta can open up but dose he have to always do things the hard way? Grate chapter Bye Bye LadyKATT
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Reviewed By: NewFan On: November 28, 2005 19:43 PST
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I have read both To Hell Together and Come Together (loved them, by the way) and I am pleased that some things are being explained. Discussing previous partners can be soo awkward for a couple, so I'm glad you included that bit (it could also be funny as hell). I hope we get to see more of Vegeta's past, that's always nice to read. As always, I'm looking forward to the next update.
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Title: WHOOO!
Reviewed By: dishgirl On: November 17, 2005 18:10 PST
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YAY! This wonderful story continues!... ^_^ YAY!... I am glad... i had hoped that that wasn't the end. I just got thru reading the two prequels to this sory an i LOVED both of them too!... OH MY GOSH! BOIY DID I LOVE THEM!... ^_^ I think you have a unique and wonderful writing style. I can almost visualize them all together. I am gald your stories are well detailed. I can't stand authors who put alot of thought into a begining of a story and either don't have the same details thruought their stories... or just NEVER update... I LOVE your stories and i'm gald that there are more chapters to come ^_^ Signed Dish ^_~
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Reviewed By: NewFan On: November 13, 2005 15:09 PST
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Heh, I like weird. I enjoyed every second of Goku and Vegeta's 'moment' in the kitchen. And reading about the Gohan incident from Krillin's perspective was hilarious. I also liked all those new little tidbits from Tien, it seems he knew even before Goku did. Anything with Bulma's mom is always a hoot. Anyway, hope you update soon.
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Reviewed By: Princess Katreena On: November 13, 2005 09:18 PST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Poor Vegeta no sweets...ya like they can stop him LoL Cool chapter LadyKATT
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Reviewed By: dishgurl On: November 06, 2005 15:36 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
i have gotta say that i was confused... i saw that your story sayed completed, but your sory itself seems to be 1/4th done...
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Reviewed By: NewFan On: October 02, 2005 14:09 PDT
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Great chapter! I love how there isn't a single character that is simply one-dimensional, they are all realistically complex. I enjoyed the insight into Bulma's conflicting emotions, and once again I am eagerly looking forward to the next update.
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Reviewed By: Princess Katreena On: October 01, 2005 13:28 PDT
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Sayain Loven' cool Update soon
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Title: Yay!
Reviewed By: NewFan On: August 29, 2005 15:16 PDT
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Yay, an update! I really enjoy your writing style, so as long as you write something, I'll read it, and reread it, and re-reread it, etc, to pass the time until the next update, which will hopefully be soon. Anyway, amazing stories, keep it up!
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Title: Great!
Reviewed By: NewFan On: August 26, 2005 14:22 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have just come across your stories and they are all great! I have been reading them obsessively over the last few days. Please please please update soon!
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