| "Fushigi Yuugi - Turning the Wheel" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] |
Reviewed By: yasha101(nli) On: August 19, 2005 23:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please oh please update soon! this is a very good story. i cant wait to read more.
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Reviewed By: kourin On: June 10, 2005 21:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Standing O.The idea to have a male miko is why I gave you a 10 for origianality. I noticed a few grammatical errors but don't worry. It's only because I tend to be a perfectionist.I only have one bad thing to say. If Hotohori turns out yaoi, i'll get mad at you. But who cares, it 's your fic! Great job! I stayed up to all hours of the night reading as if I studied for entrance exams!Keep writing! Your good at it.
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Reviewed By: Anata [MediaMiner Member] On: August 07, 2002 13:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow....This is really enjoyable. I do believe the word I used in the forum was 'fantastic'. Well....it still fits! ^-^
I hope you continue this soon. But...um...I haven't read all of FY, but I have heard that Nuriko died....you aren't going to kill off the cool characters, are you? --
Anata |
Reviewed By: Anata [MediaMiner Member] On: August 07, 2002 02:45 CDT
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Damn....I wish it weren't almost 1 am.....I have to be up early tomorrow....--' *whine* And I only got to part 2!!! You've got me hooked.
This is very good. I would have finished it sooner, but I kinda had a family emergency.....*sigh* My cat was mean and attacked my sister.
*mutter "Stupid cat..."* Anywho....I'll hopefully get to continue this tomorrow. Bye!
Anata |
Reviewed By: hiddencharm [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2002 19:26 CST
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I have one thing to say.... more.
i really don't want to waste time nitpicking and telling you what I don't like... because in fan fics, it's all about the writer and the fic. I like it, and i'm hanging off the ledge... i want more!! good job, very unique! I find my mind wandering (mostly because you are changing the sexes of the characters) so now i'm wondering about who will end up what and how certain relationships (mainly hotohori and nuriko) will turn out. Help me, ease my sanity, write another chapter! |
Reviewed By: Tamahome On: March 16, 2002 03:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
The fanfic mostly is copying the original story but mostly...ITS ENJOYABLE!!! |
Reviewed By: Fanilia On: January 06, 2002 22:59 CST
Comment/Review:
I read it all tonight, boy you have a very unique writing style. It gives the story a different feel since the characters are not trying to sound like they are from a different time period. Or is that just the way Akira hears them. There are a lot of hidden meanings that I have not figured out yet. It reminds me of riddles, and if I don't finish I will never figure out the answer. I realize that some of the mystery would be solved if I had any knowledge of the series, but I don't and still like the story. I don't use the rating system as I have a total of less than one years expierence as a writer. I am learning new things everytime I read a new fiction. Just remember I hate it when I get hooked on a story and it is never finished. Understand. |
Reviewed By: Duece of Spades [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2002 19:08 CST
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^_^ Again, I couldn't find anything to nitpick about. Settle for praise, okay?
I really appreciate Tamahome's use of 'Boss' when speaking to Akira. It places a unique spin on their relationship.
And that's...it. Can't think of anything else that really popped out. ^_^
Until Chapter five, mon 'amie. |
Reviewed By: Duece of Spades [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2002 18:50 CST
Comment/Review:
I hope you don't want in depth nitpicking, cuz I couldn't find much to pick on. You have to settle for glorified praise, you egomaniac.
I love the foreshadowing that happened previous chapter. "What's a Suzaku?" Your characterization is great.
I also liked the comparision between the two friends, each from their own POV. Keep it going. |
Reviewed By: Duece of Spades [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2002 18:33 CST
Comment/Review:
Rating from previous chapter applies, with a 10 for mechanics. I do have some questions for you.
Star warned you I was taking notes. ^_^
What was the point of the American Quarter, or was that thrown in for the heck of it? Does it have a purpose? If it does, express that purpose.
I loved how you portrayed Akira's characterization in that description in the Book of the Four Gods. The collar thing is a stroke of brilliance.
Speaking of characterization: How did Akira go from being this superfreaky flyboy to someone searching out someone just because he's in a different world? He struck me as macho to begin with, and I can't really imagine a macho man begging for help. Well...not exactly begging, but you get the idea. If this was done on purpose, then cool. ^_^
If I remember correctly, in FY, Miaka had the same traits as Akira, (Cleanliness, odd clothing) yet she was not taken as royalty. I find it odd that peasants would take Akira as royalty right away. Even if he was a male, and this was anchient China. I would think that maybe they would be in awe of him, or scared of him.
I love Mika. Sibling relationships are always good. Bring her more into the story.
*choke* You had to bring in the Kama Sutra, didn't you? |
Reviewed By: Duece of Spades [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2002 18:07 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Do you really want an opening? Okay. Here goes. Hiya fanboy.
Sytle:
I love your style. The only reason you got knocked down a notch is because some of the paragraphs could have had a better transistion, but that's it. Everything else is hunky dory.
Mechanics:
^_^ I can't find any room for improvement. If there were spelling or grammatical errors, I didn't catch them.
Originality:
I won't rate this in future chapters, just because...well...this applies to the whole fic. I've seen FY fics where authors replace the Priestess, but I have yet to see one from a male's perspective. As long as this doesn't turn out as stupid as Yuu Watase's FY, you may have a Fushigi Yuugi that SHOULD have been.
Enjoyment:
When it's not hard to read, the more I like it. This first chapter is one I like, and will keep me going throughout the others.
Overall:
To quote...someone, you got a 10 because everything else was a 10, and I cannot think of a reason to give you a lower score. |
Reviewed By: Umi-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 21, 2001 20:33 CST
Comment/Review:
Finally...others will see the greatness I have already read and enjoyed!
Now get going with more parts fanboy! |
