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| "Witness" Reviews/Comments [ 90 ] | | Pages (6): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 › » ] | Reviewed By: Font On: January 18, 2006 03:35 PST
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Okay, I know you said the next chapter would take a while but come on! It's January, this is ridiculous! Anyway, all in all this is a good fic. The Shinji/Asuka scene was good, in fact everyone seems to be giving you kudos insteaed flames as you suggested. Though one thing I don't get, she was really getting into it, so way did she go psycho at Shinji after? You also mentioned that you had an explanation for Ritsuko's state of mind. You should deffinatly post it, since there has been no exploration of her character in the entire fic. If you can't work it into the story then just in the author's notes, but you shoul do it. PS I know it's in bad form to make personal suggestions about the story, but could you please have a scene where Misato finds out about what Shinji did to Asuka? Please pleasepleasepleasepleasepleasepleasepleasepleasepleasepleasepleeeeeeeeeeaaa aaaaasse?! Even if it's just an omake? That would be so cool!
| Reviewed By: ovrboost On: December 18, 2005 03:00 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Christ almighty... Your work has disturbed me on new levels, previously thought impossible for this type of fiction. I'm glad I've finally stepped out of the confines of ff.net. I'm concerned however, as you have bascally given Shinji a psychological profile befitting of a serial killer/ rapist. I worry as to where you are taking this, and suprised that sinji hasn't killed himself yet. He is, for lack of better words, FUBAR. Please, keep up the good work, I look forward to future installments. Perhaps thing will get better for our intreped characters... but I doubt it. *shrugs* Oh well.
| Reviewed By: D.R. On: December 09, 2005 03:51 PST
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It's only every once in a while that there comes a fanfiction so skillfully written, so expertly plotted, so brilliantly characterised as to make one forgive every Mary Sue, self insert and grammerless crap-pile that the fanfiction community throws at you. This is one of those, increasingly rare, works. However, as much as it pains me there are a few things I feel the need to complain about. Okay, one thing. I had a feeling this would happen and it did, see the Ritsuko thing was new, that was good, Zerul and Bardael were both Shinji's battles and you made them more painful in new and interesting ways. But by making Shinji face Arael (and you're probably going to make him face Armisael to), all you're doing is taking the pain of the other characters and putting it on Shinji, and to me that seems kinda..well, cheap. But hey, that's my only complaint about an otherwise great story. I eagerly await the next chapter.
| Reviewed By: tomdj1701 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 07, 2005 10:58 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Interesting chapter, looking forward to the next chapter of this one.
| Reviewed By: A guy who enjoyed your fic On: December 05, 2005 23:30 PST
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Wow, man, that was fucking fantastic. It was dark, twisted, sadistic, and you know what? That's exactly what this kind of fic should be. Awesome fucking job, dude.
| Title: A Sweet fic
Reviewed By: Kargan303 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 29, 2005 10:09 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is truely a dark and twisted fic. I love it, I love the way you have put Shinji though the worst hell he has ever known and yet he his still hanging in there by a thread. I'd like to see how far you can push Shinji in this fic without going over the line of unbleaveablty. Keep up the good work.
| Reviewed By: Ghost140 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 28, 2005 09:12 PST
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Sweet
| Title: H.P. Lovecraft's Love Child
Reviewed By: Sideris On: November 27, 2005 21:35 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wonderful, absolutely wonderful. I loved every second of it and I reeled through the emotions and the motions given by this truely memorable work of darkfiction. My hats off to you sir, keep on truckin' with this fic or there will come a darkness in my fics that will consume even you. BEWARE! P.S. Awesome work, you have my utmost respect ^_^
| Reviewed By: Nick2951 On: November 27, 2005 18:33 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, that was magnificant and really really twisted. I'd say more, but there are truely no words.
| Title: MidnightCereal
Reviewed By: MidnightCereal [MediaMiner Member] On: November 27, 2005 15:11 PST
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Keep with it. It's the best thing I've read on MediaMiner. And it went good with Thanksgiving leftovers.
| Reviewed By: Lord_Raa [MediaMiner Member] On: November 27, 2005 05:53 PST
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Another quality update. Hopefully, my Eva darkfic won't be too long in being ready for public consuption...
| Title: Chapter 4
Reviewed By: Alpha Zulu On: November 27, 2005 04:32 PST
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Personally, I felt that the scene with Asuka's little...gift worked pretty well, giving the overall nature of this story. As for the 15th Angel, well, that's a new approach, but it stands well enough. I'm looking forward to seeing how the last three chapters tie it all up. Keep up the good work.
| Reviewed By: O On: November 13, 2005 20:36 PST
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Fantastic. I can't wait for more.
| Reviewed By: Feyrbrand On: November 12, 2005 22:44 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
The only problem I felt with this fic is Asuka. In such a dark world as this, her cheery, righteous comments and wishes seem superficial, naive, and out-of-character. If she is smart enough to figure out that the death of Touji is not Shinji's mistake, it is not that far off to actually realise that Shinji's wellbeing is not her responsibility too. Even if it isn't, and she's doing this out of her... affection to him, why go to the trouble of being frustated at her inability to help? Even then, how could she wish him such a comeback to life, if she can't wish it for herself. "Don't abandon life, even if it is unfair, horrible and cruel?" I can't see this being said by someone who ran away from her mother's death. Same goes for Kaji, and he is even more transparent. It felt like, I don't know, reading "Stillness" and suddenly Rei goes lovey-dovey on Shinji? Or maybe I'm missing the point and you were trying to show a wonderfully adult quality, hypocrisy. That it is okay to have ideals and high hopes, as long as they're not latched on to me. If that's what you're aiming at, I apologise.
| Title: Nice
Reviewed By: Kargan303 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 09, 2005 15:46 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a dark and very twisted fic. I realy enjoy this fic, I love the inter-play you have with the charcters and I thought Misato was going to blown Ritsuko's ass away in this chapter and I have to wonder how much more Shinji can take before he snaps. All in all this is one of my fav fics
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