| ""Trunks Lil Book Of Hentai Short Stories, Volume 1"" Reviews/Comments [ 96 ] |
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Reviewed By: misticknight2002 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 11, 2002 20:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok that is a great start to the digimon fic. I wish that I could find out what is going to happen, so get the next part up quick.^-^ |
Reviewed By: Pimp Starwind On: September 18, 2002 16:32 CDT
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I love your fanfics, i dont know if u do crossovers but reading a gene starwind (Outlaw Star) and Ryoko (Tenchi Muyo) would b real cool. Either way keep writing!!! |
Reviewed By: duomaxwell [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2002 20:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
they're good stories, but i like to read more stories about Card Captor Sakura. great job |
Reviewed By: AngelWingAsh [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2002 18:47 CDT
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Read the Cowboy Bebop fic. Not bad and you really did stick to the show!!! Very nice. |
Reviewed By: anime_wannabe [MediaMiner Member] On: August 19, 2002 21:22 CDT
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O...M...G...I dont even think I can rate this. It was, weird reading the first chappy, VERY WEIRD. I'm not used to it but it was FUCKIN FUNNY DUDE! |
Reviewed By: shaddeh [MediaMiner Member] On: August 13, 2002 23:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, okay, before you go yellin' at me for giving such low ratings, let me explain. First off, I do rate hard, I admit. I'm picky, especially when it comes to hentai.
Spelling isn't much of a problem, which is good, but the grammar is what struck me most. Commas and such go inside quotations. (Example: "Marie," he called. "What are you doing?") Id is a contraction, properly spelled "I'd." (More examples: I'm, I'll, we're, we'd, et cetera...)
The originality...well...there's a bit to be desired there. Getting locked in a room together - it's been done a thousand times over. It's the classic 'oh look we just happen to be alone' situation...fabricating a believable plot within a lemon, even a one-shot, makes Shad SO much happier. It also ups the 'enjoyment factor' a good deal...
I'll choose to ignore altogether the DBZ lesbian fic and the pizza cats thing. I have no interest in yuri and I've never seen Samurai Pizza Cats, so that's why.
The Slayers fic actually had a pretty good idea to it...but if you write for the literary value, man, at least make your hentai *tasteful!* Jeez...I take it you wrote this for guys...x_x
The main reason I rated so low on the enjoyment factor and the style of writing was because, for one, that as I said it's not very original, and two, the characters' voices seem flat...which could be partly due to the lack of decent grammar and punctuation. The description in general (And I do not mean the description of sex...) needs some tinkering. May I suggest getting a beta reader? A reliable one at that...they may be hard to find but they do wonders for your work. Better yet, get several. I always have a couple people look over my own one-shots...
Again -- don't get me wrong. I honestly think you have a good deal of potential. May I suggest exploring other, non-lemony genres to sharpen your knife of skill...? |
Reviewed By: RedDevil7690 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 07, 2002 13:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok but some r a lil scary..... |
Reviewed By: Kris On: December 07, 2002 19:37 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You should write more cowboy bebop, and card captor sakura. It was realli good wrte more!!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: Amethyst twilight On: July 23, 2002 00:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awesome |
Reviewed By: dax [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2002 08:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Its cool,overall I give you a 9.5 but I rounded up. keep writing,
Zander.
I liked it.I give it a 10.0 all the way.
Keep writing,
Amara |
Reviewed By: SakuraSyaoran4eva [MediaMiner Member] On: July 16, 2002 10:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
O... I absolutly love what you did to Sakura & Syaoran *laughs evily*. It's totally kawaii! -_- |
Reviewed By: Xelis Metallium On: July 10, 2002 11:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You did a good job, but YOU NEED LINA/XELLOSS FICS! LINA/XELLOSS PAIRING ROX! I mean, come oooooooooooooooooooooooonnnnnn... |
Reviewed By: Boo On: July 07, 2002 15:49 CDT
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That was really reallyweird but it was interesting. I don't get where you come up with this stuff but continue on, |
Reviewed By: tweety [MediaMiner Member] On: October 27, 2002 20:34 CST
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update |
Reviewed By: misticknight2002 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2002 02:32 CDT
Comment/Review:
please try to get up the lunar fic as soon as possible |
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