| "Secrets of the Uzamaki Clan" Reviews/Comments [ 110 ] |
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Title: Nice!
Reviewed By: A_bigfoot37 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 02, 2005 17:28 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am enjoying read this fic very much. I like the undecided pairings and in my opinion we should see how bold Hinata will be after seeing Naruto's change. I say this mostly because I like NaruHina the most. Anyway that's my opinion.
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Title: GREAT
Reviewed By: Tsunadi [MediaMiner Member] On: November 01, 2005 14:41 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hehe this is great but i forgot something... i hope this isn't Naru/Sasu because this is GREAT the way it is!
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Title: AMAZING
Reviewed By: Tsunadi [MediaMiner Member] On: October 31, 2005 20:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I wish i could rate this HIGHER!!! and i hope its a Naru/Sak or even funnier would be Naru/All girls in Konoha.... Wonder what would happen if he took a road trip to other villages... lol PLEASE UPDATE
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Title: nice
Reviewed By: naota_ [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2005 05:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
koniciwa!, its Nao again. I really like this story so far, its hilarius! this is probobly one of (if not most) entertaining fics Ive ever read! Update ASAP, and keep up the good work
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Reviewed By: mysterylady_tx [MediaMiner Member] On: October 27, 2005 23:11 CDT
Comment/Review:
Run Naruto RUN...LOL...that was GREAT:D
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Title: 4
Reviewed By: mysterylady_tx [MediaMiner Member] On: October 26, 2005 23:04 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
SWEET!!! that was AWESOME...LOL...Oh man, Poor Naruto so instead of having a fan club like Sasuke he's gonna be getting Harrased....LOL>..that was GREAT I cna't wait for the next chapter:D THANKS:D
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Title: 3
Reviewed By: mysterylady_tx [MediaMiner Member] On: October 26, 2005 22:54 CDT
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SWEET!!! that was a GREAT chapter...and the foxes and Naruto are starting to like eachother:D THANKS:D
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Title: 2
Reviewed By: mysterylady_tx [MediaMiner Member] On: October 26, 2005 22:45 CDT
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interesting..so he has to be able to summon the king or queen fox to learn about the rest of his powers???
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Title: 1
Reviewed By: mysterylady_tx [MediaMiner Member] On: October 26, 2005 22:34 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh Cliffy..Great 1st chapter...but that is just EVIL I mean PoOR Naruto being made fun off by his own summoning...LOL
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Reviewed By: Scyggy [MediaMiner Member] On: October 24, 2005 12:41 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
If you've seen one 'first fic' you've seen them all. Your writing style is best described as simplistic, though at points it jumps into a slightly better humorous style. It could definitely be improved. But first, I think, you need to get a hold of basic spelling and grammar. I really suggest a spell-checker, even if you have to trudge through the japanese words it doesn't recognize. And grammar, that's the point that really marks you as a beginner. Most noticibly, learn to use paragraph breaks. Every time who's speaking changes, you have a paragraph break. Even if it's a Naruto/Kyuubi conversation, putting in paragraph breaks would seriously clear it up and make it far easier to read. And speaking of Kyuubi, the all-caps thing gets somewhat annoying; usually, for alternate speaking methods, something more subtle but still easily noticable usually works better. Moving on... the concept's not all that original, but it's still amusing. Your straight storytelling skill isn't bad, not that great, but not bad either. A lot of your problems could be solved by a pre-reader that knows their grammar and spelling. I'm sure you have online or real friends with the knowledge; just show it to one of them and let them point out the basic grammar and spelling errors. I think there also might be some sort of pre-reader community on MediaMiner, but I'm not certain. If all else fails, I'm available to help. Regardless, I'm gonna stick this on my favorites and see what happens next.
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Reviewed By: bananagurl [MediaMiner Member] On: October 22, 2005 11:01 CDT
Comment/Review:
Yay! Go you!!! I really really like your story, and I really do hope you update soon. ^.^
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Title: cant wait
Reviewed By: naota_ [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2005 13:50 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I cant wait until the next chapter, your work is probobly some of the best(if not the best) stuff Ive seen on here
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Reviewed By: DdotEXE [MediaMiner Member] On: October 13, 2005 10:58 CDT
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this fanfic is great i am putting it in my fav list
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Title: naota_
Reviewed By: naota_ [MediaMiner Member] On: October 13, 2005 05:21 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awsome, your doing great, and i love the burping thing, very original
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Title: nice
Reviewed By: naota_ [MediaMiner Member] On: October 12, 2005 20:24 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a very good fic, plz keep going, Im eager to see your next chapter
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