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| "Once More, With Pirates" Reviews/Comments [ 42 ] | | Pages (3): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 ] | Title: Wooooaaah!!!!
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 23, 2005 00:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW!!!!!!!!! This is so intense I'm gonna split in half!!! How can I comment when my mouth is hanging open and my hands are nearly shaking?? That was so incredibly good! I love the scenes with Spike and Ed, they are too perfect! The commentary between the two had me absolutely rolling with laughter! And I really felt the fear in Ed with the tightness of the space, I've had nightmares of being buried in a pipe underground, so I know where he's coming from! And the introduction of the red water, like I said before, was brilliant! I like how it just keeps building! When the climax finally comes it will probably cause the site to explode! LOL
| Title: Better Than Broomsticks!
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 21, 2005 02:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
And I thought the highlight of my day was going to see Harry Potter! I was so wrong!! I am just so happy when you update, which means I'm happy almost every day! The introduction of the red water- brilliant! And your explaination of how Ed's alchemy would cause heat was also brilliant and insightful! This is definately a thinking person's fic, and you write it well! I'm curious to see how everything ties back into Q and his trial of McKenna- and I have absolute faith that it will come together wonderfully! Thanks for this latest update!!
| Title: Intrigue!
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2005 23:24 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your ability to write such an exciting mystery gets me!!! I love that! You keep me going, yet leave me desiring more with every update, that is a remarkable gift! I will never tire of reading this!!
| Title: Splendid!
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 18, 2005 02:24 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Other people really need to start reviwing!!! They are really missing out on an amazing story! I love how much attention you pay to the feelings and thoughts of the characters- you are truly sensitive to what they feel. The transporter incident was brilliant, it never would have occured to me that the FMA people would be affected by it like that, and yet it is so obvious once you explain it! This is not only entertaining writing, but intelligent as well, and it a true joy to catch all the nuances in each chapter! You definately have a talent, and is shows in your ability to make these universes work so perfectly! -Tanya
| Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 17, 2005 02:48 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thank you for that! I absolutely adore Havoc, and he definately needs more love and attention!
| Title: AWWWWW!!!
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 15, 2005 23:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That's so sweet that everyone wanted to help the doctor!! And the flashback incident with Mustang was very well written, it was such an intense and dramatic segment that it left me teary eyed with sympathy, yet equally horrified by the atrocities he'd been a part of.
| Title: "0.0"
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2005 02:45 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhooooooooo!!! That, was, AWESOME!!! I'm TELLING you! That was such a wonderful and fabulous chapter! As I've said before, the writing along is fantastic, and add to that the little things like grammer and turn of phrase that you do so well! You write like Spike fights- it flows like water! Truly stunning, and I'm so thrilled I get to read such an awesome work! And I can't get over how you write the interaction between Spike and Fullmetal, it's arguably one of the best parts of the story (though there aren't any parts that aren't great!). The fact that Ed stays true to himself in these odd surrounds (for that mater- all the anime characters do) is such fun to read! I love how he still objects the 'short' references- yet doesn't always explode, particularly if it's coming from Spike, whom he obviously admires and idolizes! And speaking of Spike, I absolutely love the last lines of the chapter where Ed asks how he survived a wound like the one across his abdomen, and Spike says he didn't. Perfection all the way! And I've really grown to love the fact that they're on the Enterprise! After all, Spike gets to interact with BRUCE LEE!!! Sqeeeee!!
| Title: Excellent!
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 12, 2005 02:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really, really like that you're writing a chapter for each of the various characters- it's important for this sort of story to develop the past motivations and intents of the characters in order to understand why they feel the way they do- as well as give motivation for their opinions on McKenna. Still in the early stages, but definately a top knotch story!!!!
| Title: Awesome!!!!
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2005 13:15 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Holy Crapness!!! You got me on all sides with this one!! Right off the bat, I laughed for about ten minutes (still am actually) about the Ed and Faye towel incident!! Oh man, I honestly thought I was gonna hack a lung- it was just too perfect!!!!! (I see another drawing here....) And then, you've got that beautiful introscection with Spike- which you captured fantasticly! He really is a deep character, and you brought out his confused thoughts on shifting timelines very well! Oh, and then the fantastic drama with Q and McKenna!!!!!! Q can be difficult to write- too many writers make him either a petulant child or an offish bully- but you've written him true to his character, a brilliant and overly wise being with a malicious streak and the desire to both judge mankind... yet somehow aid them also in an indirect way. He's not evil, but certainly not good in the sense we understand it. And I don't believe he himself has ever killed anyone without bringing them back to life. As I said, you captured it perfectly!!! Gosh you just rock!!!!! YOU ROCK!!!!!!!!!!! -Tanya
| Title: Wow
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 08, 2005 23:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You're right- more than anyone, Scar deserved his own chapter! His character is so full of depth and meaning, it's delightful to read how he views this new world that most people consider a wonderful place! In particular, I was very interested in how you crafted his meeting with Troi- that he acted completely in character with his harshness to her offering to talk. It would have ben easy to have them interact- but instead, you chose to develop the character instead, and keep him true to himself- a loner without need or desire of companions.
| Title: Wahhhhooooooo
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 08, 2005 00:41 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The Gagh scene was perfection! And honestly, it fit very well with the Star Trek setting- as Next Generation episodes often broke from seriousness to have a bit of 'in character' fun with the characters! All I can say is that every time I read a chapter, I want to immediately grab my sketch pad and start drawing scenes! Once I have some free time again, I'll do that, and send you a link to the art. Well, great as always, and on to the next!! -Tanya
| Title: Tanya
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2005 23:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Unlike the title of this chapter- I found nothing wasted in your writing! With every update you make this blend of universes more believable- a near impossible task when blending such things as anime and live action. As it is, all the characters are beautifully written, and remain true to the canon of their respective programs. Have I mentioned that I love love love that you update so frequently??? You are awesome for keeping this flowing, and have my highest admiration for being able to do so!! Well, till the next chapter, take care! -Tanya
| Title: XOver
Reviewed By: XOver [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2005 00:00 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Liked reading this new chapter of yours. As always, please keep up the good work. I look forward to seeing reactions of the various members of the Bebop crew and the Fullmetal people to their new environment (i.e. the USS Enterprise); I also would like to see how each of the Bebop crew and Fullmetal gang (including Scar) adapt/try to adapt to their new nevironment. By the way, it should not be "United Systems" but insated the "the United Federation Of Planets" or just "the Federation starship USS Enterprise" when Capt. Picard tells the Bebop Crew and the Fullmetal Gang where they currently are in. Also, where is McKenna in the Enterprise? Please let me know. Lastly, I just wanto let you know that FanFiction>net is having some trouble at the moment and as a result I couldn't read chapt. 4 from that website. Please try re-posting chapt. 4 again, OK? Anyway, please keep up the good work. Thank you. :)
| Title: Dragonnan
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2005 13:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AHa!! Now this is getting meaty!! Dang you, you're making me cry and I gotta leave for work in ten minutes!!! You're right, this is incredibly emotional- and you caught the characters responses to Q absolutely perfectly! I escpecially liked Spike's silent observation- managing to stay out of even Q's spotlight! So like the character! Awesome! -Tanya
| Title: Dragonnan
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2005 01:52 CST
Comment/Review:
Woah..... I feel dizzy.... You pulled a number on me with that chapter, you really did! I had no idea you were pulling THOSE guys into it!! However, I have faith that you'll make this make sense- and that it'll be as brilliant as your last story! (ps- at what point are we in the Bebop universe? You can email me if it's a spoiler.)
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