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| "Just Like Clockwork" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: Grey Rose Duelist On: October 01, 2010 17:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
An interesting premise, good writing, and Utena x Anthy yuri goodness...All in all, a wonderful piece of work, but I have one minor issue: Sometimes, the way you write out the courses of events doesn't make sense, like you edited out a chunk of writing without changing what was around it to make it fit. Just saying. Love it anyway, please update~
| Reviewed By: Faded Writer [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2007 23:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ah. Great chapter! Sorry for the late review, but all great stories must be savored moment by moment, I never wanted the chapter to end. God I'm in love with this story, it's ideas, it's magic, and it's angst, it's loving, emotional angst...and the Utena/Anthy moments... And that ending, with Utena and Anthy, sigh. The way she kissed and touched Anthy's hair in her bed without her armor...oh man I almost thought the girl was going into the bed with the other to snuggle up. Darn, my luck. :) That hug between Utena and Anthy after they saw the fate of Dios on that video screen was a nice touch. I also thought it was really nice how Utena compared Anthy's touching similarities to Dios, a man she had kissed and fell in love with in her old life. And how she thought of Anthy staying by her side made her fell alive and good, brilliant and a great Utena/Anthy aspect. I also loved the agony, like how Anthy thought of how all she ever did was cause other people pain and how she cried herself to sleep with the tear tracks on her cheeks. So heart-breakingly sad, I'm torn between hoping that this will tear Utena and Anthy apart, or if it will bring the two closer together, either way I believe the Utena/Anthy perspective will be heavy and heart-felt. And the kiss with Juri, at least something good came out of it, Utena's first thought was of Anthy. ;) And last but not least, I liked how Anthy opened her eyes staring at the wall after Utena's leaving. Hmm, I wonder what she was thinking about? :) Double sigh. Oh by the way, thanks for the shout out! ;) Hope to see 'more' soon, great work it was exceptionally rewarding. :) ~ Faded Writer
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