| "Intertwined Permanently" Reviews/Comments [ 40 ] |
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Reviewed By: alwayshiei [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2006 21:33 CST
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Thanks everyone for your dearly valued reviews! I'd like to just say that Ookami-san is right, in what she wrote. I did have a feeling that this story was rushed, and I apologize for my doing so. I will, at least try to slow it down a bit, and make the story more understandable. This is my first story and I realize its lack in the written area, and I will put effort into fixing that. At any rate, thank you Ookami-san, for writing a review stating it to be like so, which has made me actually pay attention to that point.Also, currently, I basically update once every weekend, in case anyone's wondering. Please, if you have a complaint, or find something to be unsatisfactory about this story, then write a review telling me so, and I will try to fix it. Thank you for time, Alwayshiei
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Reviewed By: ookami san the animelover [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2006 09:10 CST
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well, I'd have to say take your time writing this, it seems as if you rushed through it, elaborate more, i don't see where the bit with hiei liking kagome came from, there was too little interaction for me to go 'finnaly!' or 'yeha i can see that.' but anywho, just a friendly comment, please though, put a little more effort and time into your story, show the reader what you see, don't expect them to automatically know. although i think that thats something that take a long time to pass, i've yet to get good. but i hardly know the first thing about writing, Anyways, - from yours sincerly and with all due respect, Ookami san the animelover
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Reviewed By: sesskags_4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2006 17:54 CST
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That really sucks for Kagome! I guess Kagome's three friends aren't that dumb as they seems, that sucks! I wonder if Hiei will be jealous of what Eri, Ayumi and Yuka are planning ... ... ... so ... update ... damnit... ...
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Reviewed By: alwayshiei [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2006 10:58 CST
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I forgot to write my disclaimer in the story so here it is:I do not own Inuyasha, nor do I own Yu Yu Hakusho. Thank you for your time! Seeya!-Alwayshiei
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Title: Intertwined Permanently
Reviewed By: PureMiko_Kagome69ner [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2006 07:21 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That really sucks for Kagome! I guess Kagome's three friends aren't that dumb as they seems, that sucks! I wonder if Hiei will be jealous of what Eri, Ayumi and Yuka are planning ... ...
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Title: ...............
Reviewed By: PureMiko_Kagome69ner [MediaMiner Member] On: January 19, 2006 11:11 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Is it me or is Inu-Yasha and his companions stupid? I mean, come on, they choose Kikyo over Kagome! What's the Hell is wrong with their brain?! ~PureMiko_Kagome69ner~
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Title: Continue
Reviewed By: PureMiko_Kagome69ner [MediaMiner Member] On: January 19, 2006 11:07 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YES! Do continue! Is it because kagome's annoying friends were in the restaurant?? or works in it??
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Reviewed By: gcdv [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2006 18:40 CST
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I likeit but this is the part where things usually get cheesy...s'ight
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Title: YES
Reviewed By: PureMiko_Kagome69ner [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2005 07:16 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yes! Do continue!
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Reviewed By: Darkness Miko [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2005 03:19 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Update Please and when you mentioned the Sims Bustin' Out I got REALLY interested!!I have that game and I need to fullfill the Jock job and I'm done with the whole game and let me tell you a strange coincidence(sp)I made an ugly guy and ALSO named him Kuwabaka!!^_^Well update soon please!!!
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Reviewed By: deathsangel4729 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 21, 2005 16:03 CST
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Goos story, and you really do have to update soon. I can't wait until the next chapter comes out. ~DA
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Reviewed By: FataLFelineOfTheNight [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2005 10:03 CST
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im sorry but the oocness of shippo, sango, inu, etc is jus unbelievable.
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Reviewed By: gcdv [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2005 15:03 CST
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That was pretty good, please do update soon! WOOOO!
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Reviewed By: Anime Lady PIMP [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2005 19:47 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please update!
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Reviewed By: SilentPredator [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2005 18:48 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
You lost me the moment every character on the show turned into a bunch of heartless OOC shell's of their former selves. I can't even tell if I'm supposed to take the opening of this story seriously or not.
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