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| "Ships in the Night" Reviews/Comments [ 46 ] | | Pages (4): [ 1 2 3 4 › » ] | Title: Broken formatting
Reviewed By: Ib On: April 21, 2015 21:46 EDT
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Seems like this is another fic where the formatting got broken.
Really a shame
| Title: Well done
Reviewed By: Tea Wonderment [MediaMiner Member] On: November 27, 2010 08:16 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
When I read fanfics either Fanfiction.net, or on here, some chapters of the stories are... too short. Mainly, I would think it'd be because of "writers' block" or just for fun. You seem to have this sense of... I just can't explain it, but it draws me in. And overall, I'm speechless. And I thank you for introducing such pairings into the world of fan-fictions. I just hope you don't get mad, I wouldn't want to upset you. Well, ja ne. --- WhAt.is.going.ON ("I told ya so, bajeebies." | Reviewed By: Glaedr [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2007 10:42 EDT
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A very nice story that, like Loss and Redemption, pulled me right into it. One of my favorites, second only to L&R.
| Reviewed By: gohanstrife [MediaMiner Member] On: September 19, 2006 19:22 EDT
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You made me stay up intil four in the morning reading all this, and I still hadn't finished it. Fan was right; this story should be on the featured stories archives. Your style of writing is very unique, and your storyline was very original, and believable. Unlike most stories, I'm very glad to see you chose to do what you initiated; not offing the husband, and throwing a lot of drama into the mix. The ending is what I expected, though I didn't know it would continue until their deaths. It was a very good story, and very heart-felt. In counting, I think I noticed like two or three gramatical errors, and I thought I noticed more until I re-read the sentence. Very good job, and I'll add my vote in getting this story featured. -Will
| Title: Whoa
Reviewed By: Non_Euclidean_Geometeric_Shape On: September 02, 2006 07:37 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am stunned and in awe of this. Though this is all I have read of yours so far you have already made favorite author list for me. I humbly request you forsake reality in the manner of an everquest player to write as many of these masterpieces as you can. Please?
| Reviewed By: Scyggy [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2006 05:37 EDT
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I must say, an excellent job you've done. Only complete Kei/Tsu fic I've run across, and it's done very well. I agree with some of the others that the ending was a bit rushed, but if you don't pick a certain point and decide to head on to the end from there, it'll just go on forever. Still, you kept very true to the characters, succeded in the difference you wanted from other stories of the pairing, and made an overall well-written story. Even made it a 'happy death' ending, so to speak.
| Reviewed By: hinatafates [MediaMiner Member] On: June 27, 2006 22:42 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, Hawker... You've once again wowed me with your amazing talent at keeping true to the characters. You also did a beautiful job of fabricating this AU and effectively making the Tsu/Kei pairing unoriginal. For that, I am fairly disappointed, but then again, it was so flawlessly written that I cannot be truly upset. My only concern: you gave me what felt like a cop-out of an ending. It felt like you were just saying I want to be done with this and move on. But then again, I understand how hard it is to write an ending that will please the readers completely. All in all, I'm glad this was the result that came out of the roadblock that kept your Motoko/Keitaro fic from being updated. Yet, reading your Kei/Shinobu's mom fic, I was upset. It seemed like somene told you to write something where Keitaro has sex with someone different, but doesn't follow his char. I hope that when I feel satisfied with my fic, you will take my concept and write it from scratch for me, if necessary.
| Reviewed By: tomdj On: June 14, 2006 20:27 EDT
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great job tomd1701
| Title: The Liberal Democratic Monster of Malmesbury!
Reviewed By: JockoMegane On: June 13, 2006 20:50 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very nice. :) The ending was a bit cut and dry, but it was good work regardless. That's about as good a conclusion in one chapter the story could support, I suppose. Personally, I would have preferred the events in the last chapter to have been spaced out into two or three chapters, possibly bringing more in from the other Hinata girls; providing Naru with more closure, for example.
| Reviewed By: Sansa On: June 13, 2006 01:39 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow... i just finished reading this history, and i must say that i havent read a fic as good as this since a long time.i hope you keep writing like that, and i will keep reading. you really wrote the best Tsuruko/Keitaro fic until now. congratulations
| Reviewed By: DW Waffles On: June 12, 2006 19:02 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, that was a powerful story, you did a great job with this and I can't wait untill you pic up on your other story. You're a great writer and you should be comended on a job well done!
| Reviewed By: The Judge [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2006 13:36 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is the prefect fic to me. i have been reading fics for close to 6 years now. i have not read a fic that can compare with this one. it almost comes off as a novel at times so i wish u luck in the future and may the rest of the ones u write be just as incredible as this one.
| Reviewed By: Sieg_15 On: June 12, 2006 12:27 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. I've been reading this story since you first released the first chapter. Great story, ending was beautiful. And a found a good song to go with the last part that made it even better. And since you're pretty much ended the story completely, I don't think we can expect sequel. However, a new Tsuroko/Keitaro fic would be great. But, considering all your other stories are great as well, anything you release should be good.
| Reviewed By: elgreygato On: June 12, 2006 09:36 EDT
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A fantastic end. Everything fits just so with everything in its place. I might have liked a bit more info on the secondary players, e.g. Mutsumi, Kitsune, etc., but that might have cluttered up the final chapter and/or distracted from the overall tone. //In any case, kudos to you and your pre-readers for a bangup job!
| Reviewed By: Mighty Potato On: June 12, 2006 00:48 EDT
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Ive been reading this from the beginning, and always enjoyed it. This last chapter was probably the best out of the m all. It had emotion to it that moved the reader. Well done.
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