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| "Love, Death, and Rebirth" Reviews/Comments [ 14 ] | Title: meh
Reviewed By: number one hinata fanboy On: June 11, 2007 10:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
decent story you've got here.... one thing I think you should know: Because of the kekkai genkai, all of hinata's children would have byakugan eyes oh and.....there already is a resurrection jutsu. and temari killed tayuya
| Reviewed By: GrayBear32 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 04, 2007 13:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Other than some minor misspellings a great fanfic. loved every word. would like to see a second story based on these characters though. maybe something along the lines how the respective children grow up. and the continued love lives of the parents.
| Reviewed By: zigyy553 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 31, 2007 00:07 CDT
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*Jaw Drops and hits the floor* How dare you! *Starts going chibi and crying* I wanna know if he brings Arashi back! Update tomorrow so I can stop crying!
| Reviewed By: darkangel910 On: March 27, 2007 04:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Finally an update I've been waiting forever well anyway this is a really story and I can'twait for the ending I'm sure it will be great!!!!
| Reviewed By: zigyy553 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 22, 2007 15:14 CDT
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Please update this Soon! can you make naruto revive Arashi? That would be so cool! Update!
| Reviewed By: sephydaangel [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2007 19:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
dude youve got to finish this i mean damn im loving every second of it i cant read enough of it im hanging on by th seat of my pants for the enxt chanpter please get a new chapter up great cliffy at the end fyi
| Title: I agree with El Grey
Reviewed By: GDaywalker [MediaMiner Member] On: December 21, 2006 00:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm having one HELL of a time trying to decifer what you're trying to say in this fic. You need to put more commas where commas should be, more periods where they should be, break off more sentences when they're becoming run-ons. Also, you need somebody to proof-read your work, somebody who's honest and somebody you trust enough that you know they'll tell you if your story sucks. (I'm not saying that. I'm just saying that you need to work on your grammer.) Also, I don't see how you went from "he stabbed her in the back and killed her" to "holy crap! he killed his sister". I looked at it, and myuu first thought was "Holy shit! Where the fuck did that come from?!" Seriously. This isn't necissarily a bad thing, but it's kinda random. A little bit of warning would be nice next time. I like the fact that you're actually working on your fic, unlike a lot of other lazy writers (such as myself) who start fics and take months to update. That, I compliment you for. I have readers e-mailing me, asking me "where the hell are you?". Over all, I give this fic a 10 for the story, but you need to work on the grammer, because unlike a lot of these other readers, I personally hate having to rewrite everything in my head in order to understand it. I apoligize if any of this sounded like an insult, -GDaywalker P.S.- Check out my fic, Mutations (I don't know the URL, so just go to the search bar...I'm too lazy right now...), and if you want to reply to this reveiw, just e-mail me at gdaywalker@tmail.com or blade@gdaywalker.com
| Title: Bravo
Reviewed By: Xand Dagger [MediaMiner Member] On: December 20, 2006 15:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Really outstanding. Cant wait for your next update. Sorry that your comp got so messed up, i know how you feel. Keep up the great work. Oh yeah, PLZ UPDATE SOON :P.
| Title: WOW!!!!!
Reviewed By: narusaku4eva [MediaMiner Member] On: October 12, 2006 20:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
HELL YEAH! its about time sum1 did a sakura/hinata/naruto fic big fan of hina/naru and naru/saku so now im completely satisfiyed thx uv made my day cant compliment u enough on how good i think this is, its simple awsome cant wait for next bit pls pls PLS dont make me wait too long just gotta know wat happens so pls update soon and i also look forward to ne other fics u write
| Reviewed By: narusaku_69 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 11, 2006 07:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awesome i love the naruto/hinata/sakura update soon
| Reviewed By: elgrey On: May 27, 2006 23:50 CDT
Comment/Review:
The setting and ideas are good, and from what I can get out of it, the plot is at least decent too. That does put it above many lemons I've read before. However, there are a lot of problems with this fic. First, I could hardly understand it through the bad sentence structure and formatting. You really need to seperate your sentences better - I spotted a LOT of times when you didn't even use a period or capitalization. Second, Shin isn't fully developed as a character. Why do he and Anko get on so well so quickly? Why isn't he freaked out by the situation if he was such a loner before? There are many other such questions you have to ponder carefully. Think about it. Don't make him a Gary Stu. Third, drop the Japanese. Your translations are WAY off. I'm sorry if that sounds kinda harsh, but I see that way too often to be subtle about it. Just use the English meanings that you've already done a decent job of creating as the technique names. (And on a minor note, "hunter ninja" is "oi-nin", not "onin".) I'll leave out any criticism of the lemon bits, as those should improve along with your overall skill level. Judging by the writing in this fic, I think you have a lot of natural talent at this. Just take the extra time to make your work that much more readable, and you'll have audiences eating out of the palm of your hand. Be patient, be thorough, and your fics will be a success. -Regards, El Grey
| Title: !!!!!
Reviewed By: LordInuyasha [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2006 14:50 CST
Comment/Review:
YOU RULE AT WRITING!!! PLEASE WRITE THE NEXT CHAPTER SOON!!!!!
| Title: ARRGGHH
Reviewed By: TrueDarkZero On: March 01, 2006 15:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
c'mon dude (or dudet if the case may be) this fic is great, kinda sketchy on my naruto intelligence, but i have been looking for a GOOD non yaoi naruto fic and this is one of them, especially since it's going to have a Hinata/Naruto pairing, i havent seen all the episodes, but naruto should end up with her in my opinion, peace out and keep writing
| Reviewed By: DarknessReader (not signed on) On: February 26, 2006 08:03 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great! I really want to see more. Continue to write, my fellow writer!
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