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Reviewed By: Addict606 (not logged in) On: April 10, 2006 07:54 EDT
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I kinda had this flashback to the movie 'Fight Club' when Edward Norton beats Jared Leto's face in because he felt like "destroying something beautiful", when Goku was totally samshing Vegetas face up. I loved that moment, Vegeta is really beautiful but vain too! It makes me sad though that he might not be in the fic anymore, I love how you write him. But I am intrigued about how this whole new world will pan out. It was great as usual and I like seeing the primal Goku. Keep it up.
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Reviewed By: Vegeta's_Baby On: April 09, 2006 01:37 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm so impressed with this story. I thought that Vegeta was serious at first and even though im no fan of fluff the way you wrote it was awesome. I felt as hurt as goku when I realized he was lying. Keep it up ok?
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Reviewed By: BlueHairedBeauty On: April 08, 2006 22:00 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Jeez! Incredible. I don't know what to say. Harsh, dark and wow! Shocking and so in character. I knew you wouldn't make Veggie so sugary for too long. Boy was I right. Ouch.
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Reviewed By: AngelsRebellion_lo On: April 08, 2006 16:06 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Holy shit....Fucking...WOW
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Reviewed By: DragonB15 On: April 07, 2006 14:04 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is intense!
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Title: captivating
Reviewed By: Teera On: April 07, 2006 13:49 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm glad that I actually took the time to actually re-read through this chapter so I understand things better than when I originally read it. This prologue is captivating and beautiful!
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Title: OMFG!
Reviewed By: alexandraite [MediaMiner Member] On: April 07, 2006 03:50 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
(I reviewed here instead of FF 'cause I like it better) This story...I just don't have words! My heart is crushed! I read, like, the last 3/4 of it with a hand over my mouth and one over my heart! It was... horribly perfect! Please tell me that is not the end! *sobs* Camaro, you can write fluff! Just this once! *sobs*...Girl, there are no words for how awesome this was. ^-^
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Title: *cries*
Reviewed By: rena 'sama' On: April 05, 2006 09:03 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sigh. It was nice while iot lasted, even if it was based on a lie. There was such a sweet, almost violent dreamlike quality to the time Gokuu and Bejiita spend together supposedly in love. It was all just too harelquinn romance perfect with all the 'I love you's' and cuddling, and 'I've turned a new leaf and finally know happiness' shit. I mean granted love really can change a person, and drastically. But it was all too perfect, which is always a dead give away that something was very wrong. Can't imagine what Gokuu must truly be going through now. Aside from the obvious feelings of betray, loss and worthlessness. If I could hug him I would. But it wouldn't do him any good or make Bejiita less of a wretched, vicious asshole. You make Bejiita such a heartless ogre in this fic, much more so than in your others. But just like Gokuu, I love him anyway ^^ Eagarly awaiting next chappie (well duh)
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Reviewed By: Addict606 (not logged in) On: April 04, 2006 19:25 EDT
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HOLY SHIT! I got about a quater way through that chapter and was like 'Vegetas a bit OOC' but then I realised 'No, no he isn't he's really in character!' That sadistic bastard, I know what game he's playing! And you know what I love it, because Goku does love no matter what and is so loving that if someone told him that they had given apart of themselves to him he'd return it. It's his flaw and you've pinpointed it, its been there all along but people don't see it as a flaw until someone exploits it. Vegeta is so beautifully evil and perfect, and the things he said made me believe he was truly in love too. But all along hes just in love with himself and what he has suffered. But now he has defeated Goku what will he do? That last line really killed me, I read it in the summary and such simple words but so powerful, but thats how it works isn't it? Words without the fancy extras are always the most poetic, and in this case defeating. And you said you had no inspriation...
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Reviewed By: Addict606 (not logged in) On: March 27, 2006 04:29 EST
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The scene your setting is great. I'm so in love with Vegeta, he's just so beautiful. God this yaoi is killing me! Their not my couple! What am I doing? I'm loving it thats what... too good... I'm dying... need b/v... but am enthralled with g/v...
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Reviewed By: DarkAngelB [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2006 01:02 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Chapter 2 Is this the beloved Camaro? Righteous. Found the story on FFNET under your account too. So figured I would pay my respects to you here as well when I saw the story. :D
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Reviewed By: dbhotty On: March 11, 2006 13:48 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wonderful! PLEASE update!
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Title: Amazing
Reviewed By: vegetachik7 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2006 01:07 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
First off, wow. As with all of your stories, great use of grammar and originality. Your style of writing is like no other in that you really delve into the minds and emotions of every character. You see Goku as one who can make mistakes and isn't completely pure. You show that no one can be perfect and have thoughts of only goodness and happiness. And Vegeta...yeah! Such character, such a being with so many emotions under his blank mask he wears. The reader sees the good with the bad which allows us to understand him even more. I enjoyed it greatly and was always anxious to read what would happen next. The intimate scenes between the two saiyajins were just astounding. Just...wow, and perfect as expected. :)
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Reviewed By: Addict606 (not logged in) On: March 10, 2006 18:52 EST
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I really do hate it sometimes that you make me read yaoi. I'm such a b/v fan but your imagery and descriptions just blow me away and I can't not read. I'm always thinking 'How does Bulma fit into this?' and 'I really hope Vegeta loves her.' That's why Monster was so great I was sastisfied in all areas of the story. Goku is just the empitome of a mortal man, he gets a taste of sin (sin of his world) and can't turn back. Vegeta, oh Vegeta, he's somekind of sensual God/Devil but then the next moment he's so beautifully vunerable. But he's so selfish for coming and shattering Gokus world, intentionally or not. I get so frustrated, why can't Goku be satisfied with his life and why can't Vegeta just be content with himself and purpose. If that was the case though I wouldn't be writing this review, so your doing a good job. Keep it up, even though I'm going insane.
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Reviewed By: Addict606 (not logged in) On: March 08, 2006 00:33 EST
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I said I'd leave a review so I will! First I want to say your the only one who makes me read yaoi, so stop tempting me!!! Hahaha. I always imagine Goku looking so beautiful in your stories, kinda angelic. Loved this line, 'A nameless space that stood without his footprints upon it.' I just started a writing degree and this really conjured up images that made me want to write! So thanks, you've helped me in my assignment. I also loved the 'beacon' line such a perfect description. Hope to see more from you soon and don't give up, not that you would! Haha. Thanks
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