| "Naruto, this is his story" Reviews/Comments [ 16 ] |
Reviewed By: narusaku4eva [MediaMiner Member] On: October 20, 2006 08:48 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great stroy and i think iv figured out what is gonna make him suffer but im not gonna say nething to ruin it for people that dont know but theres also a chance that im wrong and im only thinking of the direction this fic is goin and drawing my own conclusions pls hurry and post next chapter wanna find out if im right
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Reviewed By: demon_wind_shuriken_no_jitsu [MediaMiner Member] On: April 30, 2006 12:23 CDT
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hey!!! this is a really great plot. love how naruto is a fricken awesome fighter. you should put more fight scenes in it. those make everybody happy. :)
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Title: the best
Reviewed By: noe mputu-mombo On: April 28, 2006 15:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love the way the story goes, i love naruto comeback, i wonder how strong they going to get. when will naruto suffer? i want to know because i love the story. will he fall in love with hinata? i think that cool. add more fighting please.
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Title: Good
Reviewed By: Dustin Imthurn dog demon [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2006 21:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
A little hard to fallow the speech in the longer paragraphs. Great idea to have Kyuubi and Naruto working togher I think he should mate with Hinta after all she didn't make him hurt like Sakura. AND DON'T ABANDON THE STORY UNFINISHED. I hate it when people do that
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Reviewed By: dskwolf [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2006 23:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You need to fix up your writing style because you can be very easily lost in the dialog and as other ppl said you need more discriptions other then those things the story is GREAT. update soon...
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Reviewed By: fLcL_FFx_lovr [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2006 00:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
that was so awsome need to write more must read more
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Title: Info
Reviewed By: XoreandoX [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2006 14:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
yea lee has chakra he can use it to some extent he can climb walls,trees etc. but he cant do jutzus like ninjutzus or genjutzus cuz if wat u r saying is true then y did lee learn to open his 5 gates??????????
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Reviewed By: noe mputu-mombo On: April 17, 2006 14:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it super please make more i love it. will you continue the story, please do
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Reviewed By: RENEGADE ASSASSIN On: March 16, 2006 20:17 CST
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EVEN THOUGH YOU STORY HAS JUST BEGAN I CAN TELL THAT IT IS GOING TO BE AN EXCELLENT FANFIC. I LOVE THE NEW PERSONALITY YOU GAVE TO NARUTO. HOPE YOU KEEP WRITING. GOOD LUCK.
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Reviewed By: ucal [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2006 16:29 CST
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I gave up reading this. Its overall plot is good, but the characters are out of character, and the writing style is *special*.
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Reviewed By: Kristie On: March 16, 2006 14:05 CST
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OMG this is such a great story and i love the way that Naruto acts so please pleases PLEASE!!!!! update it really soon thanks tootles.
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Reviewed By: xaikon [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2006 13:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
good story, good writing :) go on! :-D
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Reviewed By: randomHime On: March 16, 2006 05:40 CST
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Your writing style is kinda choppy.....
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Reviewed By: flip555 On: March 12, 2006 22:56 CST
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Great job. I really enjoyed it. The problem is though, there's not enough description. You need to make the reader feel what your feeling or the characters are feeling as your write. Describe things more, add more detail, more plot. There's a lot of good stuff, just not enough plot in it. Describe what happened when naruto saved sasuke, or give a bit of detail about what happened in the six years. Things like that. A little bit more effort will take it a long way. But I really did enjoy it.
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Reviewed By: flip555 On: March 12, 2006 22:55 CST
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Great job. I really enjoyed it. The problem is though, there's not enough description. You need to make the reader feel what your feeling or the characters are feeling as your write. Describe things more, add more detail, more plot. There's a lot of good stuff, just not enough plot in it. Describe what happened when naruto saved sasuke, or give a bit of detail about what happened in the six years. Things like that. A little bit more effort will take it a long way. But I really did enjoy it.
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Reviewed By: Felicity_Angel On: March 10, 2006 19:28 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your story! Good ideas and stuff! ^__^
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