| "Demon of Makai" Reviews/Comments [ 14 ] |
Reviewed By: Serena SilverMoon On: November 04, 2006 19:57 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Seeing as I seem to be your only reviewer Sayaka, I say keep going if you want to or you cna just stop this story and start a whole new story. You're the wroter not me so it's up to you. But I do love your work. Hope to see any of your stories in the futuer. SMILES ^_~ Good Luck, I'll still review.
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Reviewed By: Serena SilverMoon On: October 24, 2006 00:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well I loved both chapters. Are you going to continue the sires or are you going to stop with this one? You're a really good writer. Well I'm glad that Jordan is ok and that they got that Demon. AAAWWWWW Hiei and Serena so cute, glad that she got to use the crystal. Robin and Kagome were smart to wait and help out. Um what's with Yusuke and reading minds? I hope Kagome or one of the other girls hits him for that later, but it did work well when he needed it. Well I look forword to the next chapter and your next work. SMILES ^_~
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Reviewed By: Serena SilverMoon On: October 05, 2006 14:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm sorry that you lost Kurama'sFoxyMiko, but I'm still here and I like what I'm reading. Ok creepy mean demon guy needs to be feeling some major pain. What ever he did to Jordan it most not of been good. Where are the others? and how many thugs did mr. big bad bring with him? I hope that Jordan gets to atleast punch the guy in the face for what he did to them. Cam't wait to read the next chapter. You're doing a great job. SMILES ^_~
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Reviewed By: Serena SilverMoon On: September 23, 2006 02:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh It's ok, it happends to us all at one time or another. I loved this chapter, If I didn't know better I'ed think that the demon what Hiten one of the Thunder Brothers but he's dead so that leaves him out. Will Kurama and Jorden get back in time? What about the girls? why not have them use there powers when no ones looking or something? I saw let the girls get mad and let them lose I don't think the demons would live through that. LOL Cait wait to see what you do with the next capter. SMILES ^_~ Oh am I the only one reviewing any more?
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Reviewed By: Serena SilverMoon On: September 05, 2006 05:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh I'm sorry, I wouldn't just up and leave a story that I like a lot. Ok I love that Kurama got sick and started calling Jordan "Mother". Ok sad he was sick, but loved the deliriom he was in. We all know what a Momma's boy he is and that proves it. Is Jordan going to tell him about that she is? What's going on in the villge? Are the girls going to revile their powers or are they going to have weipons to fight with? What about the boys? Oh man this is going to be good.Oh I can't wait to see what comes next, in the next chapter. SMILES ^_~
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Reviewed By: Serena SilverMoon On: August 31, 2006 03:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey sorry for the long wait on my review I was out of town, and after coming home had lots of cleaning to do. Well I love the 2 chapters they were really good. I didn't think Kurama could get sick. Oh I loved when Crystla tried to kill Yusuke, and what Hiei did was good too. The poor gang in the human world are going nuts. To bad Boton or someone couldn't get a messenge to Inu and the other. Please get the next chapter out soon if you can. SMILES ^_~
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Reviewed By: Serena SilverMoon On: July 22, 2006 05:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was a good chapter, I like how Jordan got Kurama to admitt to alot of things, and the yelling at her innerself was funny. I do wonder how everyone's going to fair when the YYH group leaves the others in the village. Will the demon that's been attacking come back and is he the one they're looking for?......lol ok now I'm all hyped about the next chapter. Hope it comes out soon. SMILE ^_~
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Reviewed By: Serena SilverMoon On: July 18, 2006 08:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sorry to hear about your summer ending so soon. that sucks. I loved the last 2 chapters, they were great. I loved how Hiei knew that Kagome and Robin would tan his hid if he tryed anything with the kids and how Kagome and Robin were able to come up with a lie about the fire like that. I wonder will the other find out eachothers secrets? I mean I wouldn't buy "the plants just grow fast here" line, or the "I work out alot" line or the "I just dropped a match in the grass and that's what happend" line. Though the fact that Hiei had to be saved from a bunch of kids by "his mom's" and Serena is really funny. Oh and the thing with the boys not leting the girls "show them up" was really funny, I could just see that, 2 girls fighting with 9 guys around them trying to be better then they are. I hope that you get your school work does and somehow if you can get the next chapter out, this one left me hunry for more. SMILES ^_~
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Reviewed By: Serena SilverMoon On: July 06, 2006 02:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sorry I haven't review lately still don't have a working computer, but I just wanted to let you know that I loved the lastes chapters of your story. Oh now the fun really begins for our group. hehehe Can't wait to see what happens next. SMILES ^_~
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Reviewed By: Serena SilverMoon On: June 03, 2006 22:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved the last 2 chapters. If you don't update soon I at least hope that you have fun at your grandparents place. How did Kurama know that Jordan was there? and if it was by her smell wouldn't he have known it was her after runnying in to her later? And her inner talk with her innerself was both right. Man is Michal going to be shocked to learn about he's sisters powers. Glad to see that the RW boys are geting along with everyone now. Now all we need in a demon ack or something...hehehe. Kidding it's really good and I can't wait to see what you come up with next. SMILES ^_~
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Reviewed By: DYquem [MediaMiner Member] On: June 01, 2006 23:19 CDT
Comment/Review:
I'm sure this works well if you know witch Hunter, but although I know yu yu and inuyasha really well, it is very confusing, and none of the Yu Yu or INU characters seem to be behaving much like themselves.
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Reviewed By: Serena SilverMoon On: May 25, 2006 01:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked it, alittle short but that's ok, it was still good. So are the RW boys going to warm up to everyone and learn a few things? Looking forword to the chaos that's bound to happen when there's to many people in a house. Can't wait to see what comes next. Let the chaos bein. SMILE ^_~
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Reviewed By: Serena SilverMoon On: May 15, 2006 15:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's not a virus, it just up and died so we're trying to rebuild it or get a new one which ever is better. I love this chapter it's really good, but Mia's guys are a bit cold don't you think? Oh what did the rest of the house think of White Blaze? I'm looking forwords to the next chapter and if trouble come calling. SMILES ^_~
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Reviewed By: Serena SilverMoon On: May 10, 2006 01:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it. I'm so glad that you continued the story. I love how you had Mia being Kagome's cousin, I wonder how Mia's boys and Kagomes group are going to handle one another, and how well they're going to work together. I can't wait for the next chapter but I will, 'cause greatness can't be rushed. SMILES ^_~
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