| "Forbidden Kagome" Reviews/Comments [ 58 ] |
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Reviewed By: ookami san the animelover nlo On: June 29, 2006 12:58 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oooh i love this one too! i'd say souta botan... ^.^ i dunno i can just see them...
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Reviewed By: Kuragari [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2006 13:30 CDT
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wow! this is a good beginning. please update soon. ~aneiko~
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Reviewed By: KnightHonor15 On: June 15, 2006 20:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow love the story. I vote for either Yukina or an OC. I have two problems though so hear me out. 1. While having the two as fire/ice apparitions, it may be best that you give them a few powers to deal with and not a list. Also, I suggest for either Kagome or Souta to struggle with their powers and controling them so it appears that it doesn't come easy to them. Don't give them lists of things they can do unless they go through the proper training. Give them actual training. I've seen too many fics where the author has them with so many powers and they can do things so easily. I don't see you having the problem but their is Kagome's miko powers. Maybe you should have her have problems with those since she has two other powers to deal with. 2. The romance. Take it slow and easy or probably have Hiei fall in love first instead of Kagome. Or have Kagome hook up with somebody else. For some reason, I don't see her and Hiei as the greatest couple in the universe. But that's just me, so if you can pull it off, than hat's off to you! Okay and a third thing (sorry! If I see a good fic, I want it to be perfect, so just take it as a compliment) 3. Details. Make sure you have things like Kagome's hair put up into a bun or something. It would be hard for her to fight or train with it. Get the details covered and your on your way to becoming greatness. Sorry for the long review. It may seem like nitpicking but as a said before, if I see somebody with a great story, I want it to be perfect for them and give them a 'hard time' when I review. If you have any questions or want to e-mail me, take my name and add @yahoo.com after it. Love the story and will keep on a watch for it.
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Reviewed By: HeartStar [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2006 19:45 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please update!
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Reviewed By: Shippou_girl (not signed in) On: June 09, 2006 18:47 CDT
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I vote for Yukina. Keep up the good work. Update soon please
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Reviewed By: Shippou_girl (not signed in) On: June 09, 2006 18:46 CDT
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I vote for Yukina. Keep up the good work. Update soon Please
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Reviewed By: darknesschild [MediaMiner Member] On: June 09, 2006 13:12 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved it! I can't see the reaction Hiei gives when he finds out that Kagome and Souta are fire/ice apparitions as well. Please update soon! I'm in love with your story!^o^
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Reviewed By: darkenedsoul On: June 08, 2006 02:18 CDT
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i like your story so far please update soon!
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Reviewed By: yue no rei (ff.net) On: June 07, 2006 04:23 CDT
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ooh i like it. done before but always interesting to see how different people develop their stories. keep it up and update soon
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Title: Forbidden Kagome
Reviewed By: The Devils Girl [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2006 16:22 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
MORE MORE! MORE!! MORE!!! MORE!!!! MORE!!!!! MORE!!!!!! MMMMMMMMMMMOOOOOOOOOOOORRRRRRRRREEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! UP-DATE SOOOOOOOON PLEASSSSSSSSSSSS
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Reviewed By: ldychaos [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2006 10:31 CDT
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This is well written. I'm really enjoying this story line. And yes it is spelled Yukina. I give my vote for Souta and Yukina to be together. It should be interesting to see Hiei react to that, and keep Kagome from killing Hiei for attempting to kill her brother.
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Title: KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK
Reviewed By: hiei_kagome_youko_yusuke_4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2006 04:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please update very soon i just love the story
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Title: KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK
Reviewed By: kagsinred [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2006 02:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ohhhh your story is great so far ^_^ ^-^ *_* *-* so please update very soon i think the pairring for souto should be yuhia (? spelling)
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Reviewed By: DragonoftheMikoFlames On: May 30, 2006 22:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
its great...please keep going
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Reviewed By: deathsangel4729 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 25, 2006 12:19 CDT
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Ohhhh, I like your story so far!! ^_^ plz update soon
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