| "First Crush" Reviews/Comments [ 45 ] |
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Reviewed By: Mimi, Myself, & Iz. [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2002 17:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Neato! Really wonderful chapter! Very beautifully done. The opening part was great with Kazu and Kenta. I also loved the part with Impmon and his protectiveness of his partners Ai and Mako... and some bits of jealousy. (heehee) Even if it was just a little night out, I can only hope that Suzie and Kazu's relationship does grow. Kazu did show a lot of concern for her than just doing "how its done" on their date. At least for that moment of Mini Golf did she briefly started to forget of this "perfect" image of herself she wanted to be and just became plain lovalbe Suzie. I love the image of Kazu portayed here! (grins) Doh! I gotta remember to get his eye color right!
Please continue soon! Really enjoyable story! |
Reviewed By: Mimi, Myself, & Iz. [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2002 17:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wonderfully written chapter. Very shocking of what Suzie is doing to herself by losing her true self. Poor Suzie. I was hoping she heard those hints from Rika's Mother of what happens with dangerous diets. It is even painful to learn that even Suzie is also changing her talk and attitude.
The date scene was wonderfully written with some funny moments with Kenta. Even Kenta discusses "why not Kazu" with Henry. It also seems Kenta is NOT allergic to anything with sugar in it! (heehee) Excellent writing. Please continue soon.
~ Jodi S. |
Reviewed By: Mimi, Myself, & Iz. [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2002 17:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent continuation to your story. Now things seem to be turning bad, not just Suzie's heart, but now mentally and now physically damaging. Great writing! I also liked Ai and Impmon in this story as well. Wonderfully done!
Now onward to chapter 4!
~ Jodi S. |
Reviewed By: Trunks Serenity Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2002 09:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wooo hooo you wrote more just dont stop writing
*yippee* |
Reviewed By: Raptor [MediaMiner Member] On: May 30, 2002 21:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story. What's going to happen to Suzie? Will she be alright? Please continue this. It's one of the best stories I've read in a while. Excellent job! |
Reviewed By: Cy On: May 29, 2002 20:06 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey
I was wondering what's up with Rika and Henry(I think I spelled his name right.)
And please if possible hurry up with the chapters
because it is a ggod story!
Cy |
Reviewed By: Raptor [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2002 14:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is an awesome story! Suzie's getting worse each day, huh? Poor girl... I hope she'll be okay. Keep writing! I love this story! |
Reviewed By: Raptor [MediaMiner Member] On: May 16, 2002 18:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aw, man! Poor Suzie! What's going to happen to her? Will she be alright? Please hurry with the next chapter, this is very good! |
Reviewed By: Mimi, Myself, & Iz. [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2002 05:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yeah! So wonderfully done! It was sad that Suzie had to bring first the news to break up with Kazu. Yet, she and Kazu knew it would be the right thing eventually. At least it was Suzie that was the one brave enough first to go through telling the news. No hearts were broken, as a new journey in their lives lay before them. Excellent character introduction of Abby as well as she recalls why Kazu is Kazu.
And now... I just love the whole new relationship Mako and Suzie are sharing! (cheers) Really nicely done! And I found the toothbrushing flashback with Suzie and Mako so adorable! I feel the need to put that in art... well hopefully. I am also glad Millie finally shaped up... for the better. The dinner date that follows for Suzie and Mako is written very well. Great exchange between even when the date ends. The ending scene with Impmon and his sibling Tamers is very hilarious. Captures Impmon's character well!
All in all, very wonderfully written series. Beautiful work! Yet, that feeling of Mako being watched is a bit uneasy. Was it someone being sure that their date would go well, or someone feeling to inflict a way to damage Mako and Suzie's relationship? Maybe another story to follow is inevitable? This story just screams for more! Please continue!
Jodi S. |
Reviewed By: Silent Shadow [MediaMiner Member] On: May 09, 2002 16:51 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
No poor poor sweet Suzi! Becoming bulimic? Aww how sad. *sniff* please write more! |
Reviewed By: Mimi, Myself, & Iz. [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2002 06:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yeah! Great chapter! I love the opening part with Suzie walking in and having to confront an angry Henry. Obviously paranoid of what his sister's actions that might have cause to effect his relationsihp with Rika.
Great work throught the story. Eep! Now Suzie has discovered something about Chip she wished she hadn't. Now she is heartbroken and more over very steamed! She's angry not only at Chip but at herself! I hope she would find happeness. Hopefully Jeri can still help. ...minus the hand puppet. (heehee) Please continue soon!
~ Jodi S. |
Reviewed By: Sarah-chan On: April 12, 2002 13:12 CDT
Comment/Review:
so glad you told ppl that you posted it up here!! wouldnt want to miss the chapters now would i??
anyways this story is so Kawaii!!
hope you update soon!! as in very soon!!
Ps. heheh... im gettin the feeling that Suzie has a thing for Kazu-chan (go kazu!! take kenta's cookie!!) |
Reviewed By: Furor On: April 11, 2002 19:33 CDT
Comment/Review:
Aw... poor Suzie... I hope she'll be alright. Great job! Keep going! |
Reviewed By: Mimi, Myself, & Iz. [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2002 11:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very enjoyable story with Suzie and her falling for someone! I really like it! I still sense that Chip is not great person to be with. He even got her name wrong in her own thoughts! Still, I like how the story revolves around other relationships happening around Suzie. Nice little scene with Suzie visiting Kazu. Maybe something more could happen between them. I have a feeling Kazu made that part up about Kenta being allergic to sugar. (grins) Well, whatever it takes to get another cookie!
I can't wait for the next part! Really nice handling of the characters as they have matured over the few years for your story. Please continue on soon!
~ Jodi S. |
Reviewed By: Chiika [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2002 19:36 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Abso-freakin-lutely awesome!!! Keep on writin'! This is so awesome! ^_^
~`Azul`~ |
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