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| "Living Behind a Mask" Reviews/Comments [ 26 ] | Title: Great Story
Reviewed By: Syrus Magistus [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2007 16:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was a lovely story! I just finished the whole thing and I really only saw a couple of minor, common mistakes. First off, there's no "Kyuubi no Kitsune" in the Naruto series or in the myth it was taken from. A lot of people make this mistake so it's not something I'm going to berate you on, however the Kyuubi's TRUE name is "Kyuubi no Youko" (or Yoko if you like) Kyuubi no Kitsune translates to "Nine Tailed fox" however the Kyuubi is no ordinary fox. Its name, as referred to even in the canon, "Kyuubi no Youko" means "Nine Tailed bewitched fox" or "Nine Tailed possesed fox" or, most commonly used, "Nine tailed demon fox". The only other problem there is that I can see is that Naruto seems to know thing he shouldn't have any way of knowing without any sort of explaination as to how he aquired all that information. That and the fact that for the greater part of the story you stick to the canon just a little too close for comfort. Also, terms like Kunai and genin do not use an ( 's ) to make them plural. Kunai, for example can be used to be talking about one kunai, or hundreds of Kunai. Other than than and a few minor flaws the story ewas great! By the way, I don't know if you found this out or not but the examiner that was always chewing on the senbon, the one that you couldn't remember the name of, His name is Genma. Btw what happened to the good ol' Arashi of the Uzumaki's? All-in-all I loved this story. Naruto even got some kinky anal action. Well done making Itachi a pervert too. LMAO and a whole lot more! Keep writing! ~Syrus
| Reviewed By: AtlantisWolf [MediaMiner Member] On: February 20, 2007 03:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
At first, I thought you were going a little bit overboard with the whole evil thing. But now that I've finished reading it, I think I might actually like this version of Naruto. As for the ratings I gave you, please don't take them as simple, token acknowledgements of a well written fic. I try to keep my reviews and ratings as professional as possible, and this is truely an extraordinary piece of work. That said, I hope you know that I look forward to reading your other works of art, and will critique them appropriately. Your fanfiction writing skill is at a level that is rarely seen, one of the real masters of the art.
| Reviewed By: Inuyasha_addict 00 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 14, 2007 22:26 CST
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Cool. i love you story! Naruto and Female Kyuubi pairing was so unexpected! I really like your story but i was wondering.. Will Sasuke Ever have a mate? :P
| Title: wow.....
Reviewed By: GDaywalker [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2006 23:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow.....just...wow. Very creative. I've never seen the Naruto/(female) Kyuubi pairing. It actually surprised me. I'm impressed, also, at how well it worked. It was nearly flawless. The only thing that I could possibly say that was wrong with your fic was that it was a little repeditive (the whole "holy shit! It's a girl! thing got a bit old) and the fact that you pretty much told the entire story of Naruto in about forty pages up untill about the chuunin exams with little to no changes...over all, though it was a pretty good fic and I hope you make a sequel...or, what would be awesome is if there was some sort of alternate universe where Naruto decided not to go to the "dark side." Good work, -GDaywalker
| Title: Nibi no neko
Reviewed By: tigrasa [MediaMiner Member] On: November 23, 2006 06:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i alreadt reviewed in FF but i love the lemons...Haha nice
| Title: awsome again
Reviewed By: narusaku4eva [MediaMiner Member] On: October 23, 2006 18:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yet another gr8 fic... dont really have anything new to say that i havent already said in 'A TAIL OF TWO BIJUS' and 'RETURN OF THE BIJUS' so just good job cant wait for next fic you write... oh and pls pls pls add next chapter to RETURN OF THE BIJUS soon just cant stand being stuck in the middle of a story its really frustrating for me
| Title: @_@ a NEW fic???
Reviewed By: Dreadman [MediaMiner Member] On: September 19, 2006 17:26 CDT
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@_@ man, this fic by FAR was the best one of your fics i read. You should really finish return of the bijuus and Rubies and saph's book 2 tho before startin a other one..i cant even imangine how bad it will be to update em all... (P.S, maybe u should make the new story the sequel to this? :D) Auf Wiedersehn!
| Reviewed By: Lone Kyuubi [MediaMiner Member] On: September 10, 2006 00:30 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awesome, just fricken awesome! After reading this chapter about four times, I realised that this story would look very good in it's own manga, maybe even an anime series (although, the anime ppl mostly seem to butcher manga series) Anways, Congrats on completing your first story! I enjoyed it very much and would like to read the next chapters of your other stories soon. Until next time, see ya!
| Reviewed By: m-painn [MediaMiner Member] On: September 09, 2006 17:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
whoa! that last chapter was something i did not expect,thatwas tight tho,naruto with kusunagi,i say ur a really good writer, i cant wait till you get your other stories done, i wish you luck in your writing and hope you dont get writers block
| Title: Katana Haibane
Reviewed By: AuronX [MediaMiner Member] On: September 09, 2006 16:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was quite an excellent way to end the story. I must admit that it was quite appropriate how you killed Sakura along with all of the others. Especially how you made the Kyuubi absorb most of them to regain her living form. I must admit that the Yondaime's reaction wasn't what I was expecting, but was logical. Especially if you consider the fact that Naruto is his son. An interesting and quite excellent fic. Great Job!
| Reviewed By: Aoidragon [MediaMiner Member] On: September 09, 2006 11:48 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
x_x too good a story...must read... why did the chapter have to end??? *cries* update soon! i'd like to see what happens next, now that Naruto is the king of demons
| Title: Lawlz. Nice wit the "Fit for a queen bit"
Reviewed By: Dreadman [MediaMiner Member] On: August 25, 2006 22:25 CDT
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Love the "fit for a queen" bit. Defianatly shows the real love between naruto and kyuubi, not just as a sexual relationship, but as a true bonding, and that the REALLY love one another. Also love how The Yella Flash got in there. Love to see what happens when naruto talks wit him. Also, since he has never gotten, "The Talk" if ya know wat i mean. -_^ Cant wait till next chapter. Keep it up! (o and this has been on my fav, god u are a good NaruxKyuubi writer :D)
| Title: More lemonz. Lemonz taste gooodzz
Reviewed By: Dreadman [MediaMiner Member] On: August 25, 2006 21:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, dread here. Want to ask bout the Kimmono's. Was wondering, why would 2 Missin Nins be wearing kimmonos? Unless they changed their default styles of fighting, since a battle kimmono was used for the sole purpose of free movement, and while this fits due to them bothing weilding swords, it would mean that the Childori and Rasengan wouldnt be used, since the chakara would likely catch the silk used in the kimmono's on fire o0 Also, congrats on having naruto summon Kyuubi in front of Sakura and Hinata. LOVED how she was asking if she could eat one of their arms off or burn them. THe puppy eyes no jutsu was hilarious to imagine as well. Well 10 allz for j00! Keep writin (P.S, this lil perv wants more lemonz, since lemonz taste gooooood xD)
| Title: Awesome
Reviewed By: Ignorant Boy [MediaMiner Member] On: August 25, 2006 00:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoy this fic, it kicks ass. ^-^ Well, i would like to see some more action between Kyuubi and Naruto. Well, just because kyuubi/naru fics rock. I also like your descriptions of such *ahem* scences. But i have read some really great lemons, in my time as a fan-reader, and this story has a good lemon, but I wish you have a more drawn out description, and maybe include some more fore-play in thier as well. As to a question you asked before about f we wanted to see a make-out session or a full blown lemon, i would prefer the lemon *sigh* (I am not the only one here that is thinking that. I am giving into what little perverted things i do, which is read lemons and other fanfictions. IM NOT THE ONLY ONE!) Well anyway, i would also like to point out that Naruto and sasuke are a little TOO powerful, even though they were given cursed seals and such. Just my opinion. I also would like to see naruto get fuzzy ears and tails, just cause they are kwaii (-_- i hope i spelled that right) and it makes for great kinky lemons stuff. like that fore play was talking about. Anyway, i was just writing this to tell you that you are a great writer (but dont let it go to your head please) and that i would be honored if you answered to my review in your next update! o-0, almost forgot, i see that Sasuke isnt getting any. (poor Uchiha) I think you could have Sasuke ask to join in once or more time and make your lemons a three-way, just to mix it up a bit. OR you could probably turn it into a EXCELLENT awkward situation. Or maybe you could have Sasuke get curious as to what Kyuubi and Naruto do, and maybe have him spy on them. ( God that would be hilarious.) But i mean your got to throw Sasuke a bone sometime, im sure he wishes he could be Naruto's place. Keep up the great work! And update frequently! Great Job! ~They say Ignorance is bliss, heh, they dont know the half of it.~ Ignorant Boy.
| Reviewed By: korigostar [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2006 15:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i think you should have a lemon every few chapters but thats just my opinion and i think you deserved this rating if you know any other naruto/femkyuubi storys could you tell me
| Title: Nice
Reviewed By: DracosEchidna [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2006 18:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice. i love this story, as well as all your other ones. cant want for the next chapter. keep writing the good stuff :)
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2006 19:36 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
A.) Kickass fic. I like it, and even though I don't MIND Yoai, Naruto Yoai is like, 'WFT?' Sasuke and Naruto, not in a million years, unless Sasuke finally killed Itachi, or his revenge was accomplished by some other means, he works too hard, simply enough. B.) Naruto as a Genius, rocks, always. I really like him having a Non-Bloodline limit personal move, makes him more cool. C.) This fic is well written, regularly updated, and is pretty fun. Not to mention that Kyuubi has the proper attitude she has in the manga. I REALLY like Kyuubi being sadistic and seductive, its amusing as hell. Please keep updating, so we can keep reading. Afterall, who does Sasuke get to hook up with afterall? IN addition, THANK GOD you do not do Yoai. I see another Uchiha-incest story, I will kill something. Not joking, that shit is fucked up. REALLY, I mean that. Anyway, good stuff, keep the updates coming. ANd lets see the other Akatsuki get trashed by the brothers, shall we?
| Title: uncertanties
Reviewed By: Crazy_Killa On: July 23, 2006 20:21 CDT
Comment/Review:
just a questoin. what did u update i cant find any difference to what i remember befor and there is no new chapters.....soo what did u up date?
| Reviewed By: Bloodbrother [MediaMiner Member] On: July 18, 2006 21:03 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really like it keep it up
| Title: second chance
Reviewed By: TrapedSoul [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2006 20:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
hi! im sure you remember me and you never gave me a chance to explain before you BLOCKED me on FF ok first i have nothing against your story its fine and all you just put extreeme angest in it and it was completely different fron your other story but it was still good you must understand that i wrote some of those reviews at like 3 AM so its nothing against you im not a flamer and i like your stories so please dont block me on FF any more please! ~TrapedSoul
| Reviewed By: kitsuna ~not logged on, too lazy~ On: July 12, 2006 18:09 CDT
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10/10 on everything except for some minor spelling mistakes. Oh, to correct u and the reviewer below be, biju is actually spelled bijuu, okay? And Kyubi is spelled with 2 u's. Kyuubi. Well, those are the most obvious but otherwise, great. Keep it up!!
| Title: YO!
Reviewed By: Dreadman [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2006 01:25 CDT
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Hey, i just wanted to point out, that it bijyuu (i think 0o) not biju, so i thought you should no :D not trying to flame ya, just givin a lil help full advise ^.^
| Title: chapter 4
Reviewed By: firelord [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2006 01:47 CDT
Comment/Review:
another fantastic chapter i realy injoy the freacwancy of your updates it makes it realy easy to remember what hapend in the last chapters keep up the great work and update agin a.s.a.p.
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2006 01:35 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
hmmm, interesting story, an AU with a darker and more intelligent Naruto. Makes things much more interesting, he is definitely much more than the dead-last ninja in the anime, but a clever mask? that makes a lot more sense. Anyway, keep on going, this is some good stuff.
| Title: chapter 3
Reviewed By: firelord [MediaMiner Member] On: July 04, 2006 21:14 CDT
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wow thanks for the fast update keep up the fantastic work and update agin a.s.a.p
| Title: chapter2
Reviewed By: firelord [MediaMiner Member] On: July 04, 2006 03:07 CDT
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that was a fantastic chapter keep up the great work and update agin a.s.a.p.
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