| "Training Edward Elric" Reviews/Comments [ 59 ] |
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Title: WOW!!
Reviewed By: Ed On: August 16, 2007 18:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your story is ssssssssooooooooooooo intense!!!! I LOVE your story!!! you need to write the next chapter as soon as possable!!!! Have you written any other stories on media minor? If so e-mail me the names! My e-mail is luvdragon475@aol.com
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Reviewed By: Lirilith [MediaMiner Member] On: July 17, 2007 15:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! I knew I'd like the story since you wrote it, but it was even better than I thought. While it is set in a kind of AU, the characters stay believeable in the situation. The motivations for Ed and Roy stay true to their characters and it's really involving for the reader to be able to know both their thoughts on what's happening. I am torn between wanting the entire story RIGHT NOW and wanting it to keep going on! Since you haven't actually finished it yet, I guess I don't have much of a choice between the two. I probably don't need to mention that I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2007 07:22 CDT
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Finally, an update! Heh, now this is getting interesting (though pretty fucking sad I have to say). Still, it is a necessary step in Ed's Training, that he had to be broken, and proven that he could obey. Eventually, Ed would either be broken completely (something no one wants) or enough that he can get through the training (and still maintain some of his identity). Either way, Ed is gonna have to give up a lot for this training. Not fun. Not good either. Still, Ed chose this. Maybe if he does accept some things, it can lead to something more. Anyway, thanks for the good wishes for July 4th, it was a good day, especially the fireworks. Okay, I need to get breakfast, later.
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Title: Awesome
Reviewed By: xXx_Wings_of_a_demon_xXx [MediaMiner Member] On: July 04, 2007 17:54 CDT
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I'm incredibly surprised. I had a vision that in my minds eyes, Edward would just call him Master, and then He would keep doing this. I should have seen how you portrayed him- strong in spirit. Poor Eddie! I'll never use the name again -sob-...okay, I probably will, I'll just feel a bit sick after words. It's great- you've gottewn so many reveiws! x) Keep up your great work. I envy your grammar...
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Title: MY title or the title of the story....
Reviewed By: Meyham On: July 04, 2007 17:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your grammar is EXCELLENT. So many RoyEd fics are ruined with slaughtered grammar. I gave you an 8 for originality because even though bondage/master-servant isn't anything new to yaoi, it wasn't "sex bondage" and neither participant enjoyed it. Even though this is AU and maybe OOC, it still feels like Roy and Ed (not just two characters named Roy and Ed). At first I was sceptical about making Ed call Roy 'Master' and Roy calling him Eddie, but I trust you not to over-do it. I will defintely keep checking in on this and maybe you'll see a review of it on my LiveJournal. Whatever you do though, don't make this a MPREG!!! Excellent job on "Blind Obsession". *goes off to review that too.*
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Reviewed By: Cassia On: June 08, 2007 23:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am enjoying this story very much. I am awful and almost never leave reviews on anything, but I just had to for this. The writing style is very clean, visual and well-thought-out. It is easy to 'see' exactly what's happening at all times. The characterizations are completely spot-on and the premise is very interesting. It's a great idea, but one that can no doubt be very tricky to write. It takes a subtle hand to be able to keep Roy's character true, to hold onto reminding us of his humanity, and that he obviously doesn't enjoy this one little bit. This is essential to the story and it's being handled masterfully. Usually, I find it a bit cliched when people include journal entries in fics from the characters POV, but in this case it works really well. And Poor Ed... you show him so well. So proud and stubborn, but starting to eventually realize the inevitable... especially if he can convience himself he's doing it for Al. Is it horribly twisted of me to admit that I can't wait for when things start amping up a little? Okay, so it is *shrugs* but there you go. I'm twisted and I can't wait. Bring on the angst and owies! >;) I am really, really enjoying this story and cannot wait for the next instalment. In the meantime, I must go read more fic by this delighful author I have discovered... :D
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Reviewed By: TaintedShikonShards [MediaMiner Member] On: May 12, 2007 23:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This has become the fic that i check my email for updates for everyday! Thanks for writing such an addictive story, i can't wait for the next chapter. Mustang's journal entries are my favorite part of the story because its easy to see and read Ed's perspective throughout all of this yet Roy's thoughts and the effect all of this hardship has on Roy isnt as easily seen. So through the entries I feel like I can get a little deeper into the relationship between Roy and Ed.
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Reviewed By: flame_alchemist_lover101 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 05, 2007 16:35 CDT
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I can't wait for the next chapter to come.
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Title: Too Good For Words!
Reviewed By: Lovely Lust [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2007 02:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This has to be, without a doubt, one of the best things I've read in a long time! I couldn't wait to read one page after another and I am yearning for more!!! I must know what happens next. Please, please, please update soon! >x
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Reviewed By: Kagome_the_Yorkie [MediaMiner Member] On: February 28, 2007 18:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! Six rewiews...I'm proud. And glad. Now I get to know what happens!
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Reviewed By: flame_alchemist_lover101 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2007 10:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked the chapter you added. I can't wait until the next chapter comes.
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Reviewed By: kenela [MediaMiner Member] On: February 19, 2007 17:37 CST
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omg i luv ur story!! please please please update!!! i really want to know what happens next. i think you described mustangs character really well
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Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: February 18, 2007 04:52 CST
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For the material, and the way this is done, the story is good. Still, this is a psychologist's equivalent of pavlov training, really. Actually, it is the ideal pavlov training method. Scary thought. Still, Ed really is an idiot to not get the full info before going in on this. This training may get him all the info he needs, but he'll have to be broken first. Or, he'll be truly obedient, and do a damn good job. Who knows. Anyway, this story is weird and scary, but well done. Keep it going, and maybe I'll get to see Mustang and Ed forgive each otehr when this is done. Anyway, later.
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Reviewed By: TaintedShikonShards [MediaMiner Member] On: January 25, 2007 21:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I still love it. Please update as soon as possible! It's just one of those fanfics that has such an original plot you can't stop reading....well that is until you run out of chapters! Which is why im practically begging you to update!
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Reviewed By: flame_alchemist_lover101 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 14, 2007 09:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I thought it turned out real good. When is the next chapter coming? I really want to know. ^_^
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