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| "Love's Revenge" Reviews/Comments [ 17 ] | | Pages (2): [ 1 2 › » ] | Reviewed By: -anon On: December 01, 2009 00:24 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Comment/Review:
I just wanted to point out that despite spell check saying that there are no problems in how you spell things, are can still obtain quite a lot of typo's without realizing it.
| Title: Ummm
Reviewed By: RyuuAngel [MediaMiner Member] On: November 16, 2009 23:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well now! Wasn't that quite... smexy. lol. Okay, I truly did enjoy reading your fanfic, but there were some major OOC issues, which you know about, so yeah. I understand, because I'm starting to write fanfics myself for this show, and I only just started watching it. So yeah, I understand how terribly hard that part is. ANYWAY! You need some work on your spelling and grammar, and your story idea lacked originality, but the overall writing was good. I can taste the potential you have. Keep working at it, and some day you'll be great, I promise. You've got a very nice way with words. ^.^
| Title: Very Good!
Reviewed By: Yaoi_Perv [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2008 15:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
It was a very good Thrill Pair fic...I'm going to check if you have anything else...Thank you for writing! Have a good one!
| Reviewed By: foxyval [MediaMiner Member] On: January 01, 2008 14:54 CST
Comment/Review:
sorry for the double-post (due to error)
| Reviewed By: foxyval [MediaMiner Member] On: January 01, 2008 14:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Quite an enjoyable story. But I had to slow down often, so I could translate some of the words. Typos here and there (and often), but at least more than half the words were understandable. The basic plot is familiar to me, but also one that I like.
| Reviewed By: foxyval [MediaMiner Member] On: January 01, 2008 14:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Quite an enjoyable story. But I had to slow down often, so I could translate some of the words. Typos here and there (and often), but at least more than half the words were understandable. The basic plot is familiar to me, but also one that I like.
| Reviewed By: Calathiel [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2007 16:03 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked the story and you did a good job on the lemon indeed but... I'm sorry to say that the spelling and grammar kinda sucked and I was annoyed quite a few times by it during this fic. If you're not good at english, ask someone to beta you. If you are, please just check it over before you post it. I'm not claiming to be perfect with english grammar (far from it), but it was a kinda bad. Still great job on the story itself ;) so no worries there
| Title: Hmm...
Reviewed By: Ciiah-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2007 14:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, I should start with the bad things; It seems quite strange, the fact that some of the chapter had perfect spell and grammar, but most of them had extremely poor grammar and spelling. I'm not trying to be mean, since I'm not a perfect english user either... but some of the words were just... very weird. It was hard to figure out what you meant to write... for example the word "Pusishon". I'm pretty sure you meant to write "Position"... And it's slightly confusing that some of the chapter has waay better spell/grammar than others. And since I'm such a whiner, I also must say that when ppl in fics talks, you shouldn't use too correct english. Use more slang words and think about how a teenager would say something. They all sound like dictionaries. Heh... But the plot is nice! (whining-part is over) I like the plot a lot, and I believe it's one of the most romantic P.o.T-fisc I've read! ^^ I liked Fuji's little revenge on Tezuka, and I think I actually laughed cruelly as Tazuka got punched! (Ha! Take that, Tezuka!) The lemon was also very nice! One of the better lemons I've read in my days as a fanfiction-freak. ^^ Good work. Although I really think you should get yourself a beta. Your plots are very nice, and the fic would've been perfect if not for the poor grammar/spell. I'm sorry to say it, and yes - I feel very cruel right now. I'm just being honest. But I want to make it clear; I liked this fic! If I didn't like it I would never have read all nine chapters. ;) Keep up the good work! *chu*
| Title: Okay
Reviewed By: Bio Uotani [MediaMiner Member] On: April 14, 2007 21:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good story
| Reviewed By: Fluffy of the SKT [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2007 13:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
When I first read the summary, it seemed like an interesting topic. I hate to say it but the spelling and grammar really do take away from the plot. At times, trying to understand what a specific words is disrupts the flow of concentration required to enjoy and read fully a fanfic or anything for that matter. Being the strange person that I am, spelling mistakes in a book can hold my attention for minutes on end before I finally get back to reading, and then the fluency of the plot has a kink in it for me. Obsessive, maybe, but I still think that the general plot of the story would be much better and more people would enjoy reading it if they could focus on the good idea you have going there. One more point would be the characters are a bit out of character, but if you meant for that then I think it works well enough. Perhaps you could get a beta for you works? Merci et bonne chance.
| Title: criticism
Reviewed By: carodajka On: April 03, 2007 05:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
atrocious spelling&grammar ... (the minimum should be doing the spell check in Microsoft Word) and well, the story is a bit naive ... like written by a 14-teen girl, BUT don't misunderstand me, it was quite enjoyable reading, not every time is person in a mood for heavy 'mental' reading ;) so, my advice would be to definitely get an editor (or beta reader) or just some spelling-checker and continue to write :) sometimes think about logic of character's action (like what would they do being their respective genders and ages, not have all of them acting like teenaged girls...) I hope this review is not that discouraging and I wish you luck with writing ;) and for the fair trade - the things I wrote were maybe even worse than yours ;) (except the spelling) guess not everyone is suited to be a writer
| Title: criticism
Reviewed By: carodajka On: April 03, 2007 05:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
atrocious spelling&grammar ... (the minimum should be doing the spell check in Microsoft Word) and well, the story is a bit naive ... like written by a 14-teen girl, which you probably are, BUT don't misunderstand me, it was quite enjoyable reading, not every time is person in a mood for heavy 'mental' reading ;) so, my advice would be to definitely get an editor (or beta reader) or just some spelling-checker and continue to write :) sometimes think about logic of character's action (like what would they do being their respective genders and ages, not have all of them acting like teenaged girls...) I hope this review is not that discouraging and I wish you luck with writing ;) and for the fair trade - the things I wrote were maybe even worse than yours ;) (except the spelling) guess not everyone is suited to be a writer
| Reviewed By: crystallyn On: March 26, 2007 15:41 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
this was a great fanfic, disregarding the spelling and grammar. Though it shouldn't be that bad with spell check and all. I love the fic, but it would have been better if it went on longer, it does take longer for your affections to shift and falling in love that quickly just made it seem like one of those fics where the whole point was to show how the two characters got to the lemon they're starring in. I'm someone who's most likely to read long fics where there's some conflict and it takes a little longer for the characters to come around and embrace their true feelings... of course with a hell of a lot of problems in between. so... for something that i wouldn't normally read... this is very good! So keep trying, keep on writing, and look at this as a compliment, which is what I hope you'll see it as.
| Reviewed By: yoleichang On: February 06, 2007 23:12 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
your story is interesting to read...well that is to say the first 2 chapters are interesting. I'm sorry to say that I can't read anymore then that because you need to spell check the story in a major way. It hurt my eyes and brain to much to continue
| Title: Umm.. Okay?
Reviewed By: musichika [MediaMiner Member] On: January 01, 2007 22:03 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
The spelling was terrible and I found it extremely hard to decipher the meaning of some of your sentences because of it. You need to have it edited.
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