| "Sailor Moon H Legend of the moon shinobi" Reviews/Comments [ 97 ] |
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Reviewed By: dragoonvixenofshadows [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2008 15:37 CDT
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please use quotation marks in the story so we readers know when the charicters are speaking. and indent when a person does start to speak and for a new person speaking, so we know who and when the dialogue belongs and when it started, other than that its really good so far. right now im on chapter 2 and the quote thing was really annoying me. vixen
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Title: About the next chapter
Reviewed By: Gravenimage [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2008 14:53 CST
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Al right people Im a little undecided about writting the next chapter I have been thinking in making the chunin exams I might write a three part saga BUT I also have been thinking in skipping the chunin exams and beginning with the first time skip of the story I don't know what to do I need your opinions.
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Title: Dango!
Reviewed By: Sukrai On: January 18, 2008 17:02 CST
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The name of the food is Dango! Dango with Red Bean sauce! And usually she has sake or tea with it, depending on if she's on duty or with company...
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Reviewed By: Taeniaea [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2008 08:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter
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Title: MERRY CHRISTMAS
Reviewed By: Gravenimage [MediaMiner Member] On: December 24, 2007 23:39 CST
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All I have to say is.......MERRY CHRISTMAS TO ALL OF YOU AND A HAPPY NEW YEAR and dont worry I will continue writting fan fics so believe it.
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Title: Supremely awesome yet again.
Reviewed By: lord fox On: December 06, 2007 22:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
As usual great job. I'm glad to see that the small lady is in it. And boy oh boy was it a surprise when she used some of Naruto's moves. I am curious though if the demon doesn't break free Will you merge him with Naruto I've read stories were they've done that and makes Naruto a lot stronger. And I think I know what you're planning for our fire warriors but I'll keep to myself. I'm also glad to see two of the sand siblings there. Now all their missing is the much cooler one Gaara rules.
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Title: About Rei and Sasuke
Reviewed By: Gravenimage [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2007 22:44 CST
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Thanks for the suggestion I do think Rei and Sasuke make a cute people but unfortunately that's not gonna happen sorry I need Sasuke with Sakura because I like it the same with Naru/Saku but anyway as for Rei and Sasuke I have something very shocking about them in future chapters you guys wont believe for what I have in store for the two but I will give you guys a hint its nothing romantic but you guys wont believe it its something shocking so sorry for leaving you guys hanging so keep reviewing because the story is gonna get better believe it.
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Reviewed By: rei hino [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2007 20:27 CST
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i don't know if u read ur reviews or anything but if u do well thats good. anyways i think that (i know, this is very surprising) sasuke should be with rei hino. u don't have to put it in ur story if u want to but i think it would be very funny. i think the couple is cute but hilarious at the same time. i mean, c'mon, a story isn't interesting without sasuke going out with someone different. to tell u the truth, i'm starting to get tired of those sasusaku fanfics and amvs because there are so many of them and it's always the same thing every time. he falls in love with her and she falls in love with him. i mean, sasuke can never fall in love with sakura because sakura's love is selfish. even the creator of Naruto said it himself. She just wants him because every other girl wants him. i'm very sorry for being rude, this is just an opinion. actually, i'm not good at writing stories so yeah, well, anyways. i like ur story, it's getting good.
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Reviewed By: Taeniaea [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2007 16:00 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great Story!!
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Reviewed By: Split On: November 08, 2007 16:56 CST
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Split up your paragraphs. Some of them are way too long which makes it difficult for people to read.
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Reviewed By: Sukrai On: October 27, 2007 19:58 CDT
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Yes, you should link part 2 to this story... or at least leave an author's note after the last chapter pointing to it. I like how you made Usagi the one who convinced Naruto to go back, that was something that both she would do and yet you don't expect it! Good job!
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Title: Supremely awesome
Reviewed By: lord fox On: October 10, 2007 00:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I would first like to say great story so far keep up the good work. I think you should make the sequel part of this story. I also noticed a little Kakashi and Setsuna in one of your chapters I think that's great I hope we see more. Also in the sequel will you have the demon break free from the seal? I just curious because I've heard that supposedly that the seal was weakening by the time Naruto was that age. I think it should break I think it would awesome to watch the sailor scout's fight the demon. Also well Gaara and his demon played to grow in the sequel? Also will small lady play a role in the sequel. I hope so I would like to see her reaction to her uncle. Also in the chapter were Naruto was tempted to the darkness I think you could go back there if you wanted to and split the story and do a what if Naruto became evil. And in the sequel maybe you could get Hinata together Naruto along with Hotaru. I think Naruto could use all the love he can get plus no ones better for Hinata then Naruto but this is just a suggestion to add more intrigue. I can also see a little bit of Ami Naru action going on I like that as well. One more question will the sailor stars along with the other sailor Scouts from the last series sailor stars make an appearance?
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Title: About the sequel
Reviewed By: Gravenimage [MediaMiner Member] On: October 09, 2007 19:43 CDT
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Yes I am going to writte a sequel but I dont know if I shoud included in this story or should I do it separately so please I need your opinion on this but there is no doubt that there is going to be a sequel so please send your review for your opinion thank you.
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Reviewed By: Sukrai On: October 09, 2007 16:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
The end? THE END!?!?!?!? You still have an entire arc to do yet!!!! You can't just leave us hanging! What about the senshi coming to Konoha? You KNOW that Orochimaru had enough time to deduce a way to synthesize the Guinzuishou, so why pull our leg with this 'last chapter' stuff?! Pleeeeeeeeease don't end it yet!
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Reviewed By: Fox storm On: October 02, 2007 20:42 CDT
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I love this. I hope there is a part 2 Also I hope Naruto and Hotaru stay together.
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