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Reviewed By: Aislynn Goldleaf (Being Lazy) On: June 29, 2009 05:43 EDT
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Uh, oh... Didn't Marik forget something? Joey has Aten's liver! I can see (just from that, forget all the massive foreshadowing going on!) that something's going to go wrong! Once again, a wonderfully well-written chapter. Loved the little scene with Bakura/Ryou too!
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Title: Very impressive work!
Reviewed By: The Schizo of Destiny (not logged in) On: April 10, 2009 16:35 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This chapter really put tears in my eyes. Aten was a great person, I can really relate to his friends and family when it comes to their feelings. You did a great job at writing this, it has the right mood and the right words, and the character's reactions are natural. I'm still very impressed by your work and I hope you'll keep this up. Good luck writing the other chapters! I'll be waiting patiently for your next update. :)
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Reviewed By: bb On: April 05, 2009 17:25 EDT
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Why havent you updated?Its april you know?The chapter said you'd update on the 27th of March.I love your stories!Please update when possible.I want to see the plot thicken after such a sad event.I feel bad for the gang and Aten.I knew this was coming but it actaully gave me a ache in my belly when I read this.Few fics have actually made me feel that way.See from you when the update happens^^
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Reviewed By: Y.A.17 On: December 16, 2008 21:01 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i actually cried on this one it was so sad... and brought back a bad memory/dream... i may not know what it's like to lose a child but i cried for days after the dream i have involing my first....
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Reviewed By: Aislynn G (too sad to log in) On: November 14, 2008 13:37 EST
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::sniffle, sniffle:: I don't really have anything to comment about except that this ::sob!:: was really well written. Before I go to my room and cry my eyes out, I'd just like to give you the "Giant Hanky Award". ::sniffle:: I mean, we all have to go sometime, an' we knew this was comming, but... still... waaaaaaaaahhhhhh! ::runs off to bedroom::
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Reviewed By: bb On: October 18, 2008 20:24 EDT
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0.0 Man so much has happened since I was away.I'm sorry for not reviewing.School has been hell and I havent had much time to do much else.Anyway so we find out Heaven is the two assholes kids.And Robbie actually beat up on Rhonda.Go Robbie!Well I gotta go.Good chappies so far^^See ya!
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Reviewed By: bb On: October 18, 2008 20:23 EDT
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0.0 Man so much has happened since I was away.I'm sorry for not reviewing.School has been hell and I havent had much time to do much else.Anyway so we find out Heaven is the two assholes kids.And Robbie actually beat up on Rhonda.Go Robbie!Well I gotta go.Good chappies so far^^See ya!
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Reviewed By: The Schizo of Destiny (not logged in) On: May 16, 2008 13:05 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Wow, this is getting more interesting with every chapter! That dream Marik had is really making me wonder... All I can say is that I will ever be looking forward to your updates. Keep it up! ^_^
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Reviewed By: bb On: February 29, 2008 20:09 EST
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So Rhett can heal while Kai can cause a thunderstorm.Though no one knows Kai caused it.Everyone seems to at least notice Rhett having shadow powers.I wonder when they'll figure out that Kai also has magic too?Oh and Marik has to kill Aten!I read in some responses that Aten would be brought back and be evil then Robbie would have to defeat him.You probably changed your mind on some things since then and have new ideas for things.I cant wait to see what you have planned.See you on the 31st!
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Reviewed By: bb On: February 01, 2008 00:36 EST
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I like the name you chose for Miracle,Heaven Raine Ishtar.I think its pretty cool(:Glad Aten is warming up to her.I'm sure he'll be a good dad.If Heaven is Rhondas and Erics(which she probably is) then I feel for Robbie and Aten.I mean having your adopted daughter the child of your bullies.Man that has got to suck but she's loved,cared, and in better hands than if she were with those asshole's.Well see ya on the 28th!
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Reviewed By: CC On: January 18, 2008 00:32 EST
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Man.I havent read this in forever.I see Kai and Rhett are displaying shadow magic.Though I thought Rhett wouldnt show his powers until later becuase he's like a year old.Speaking of babies,Aria's pregnant again.I knew my friend was telling the truth.So I'm guessing the baby is Seto's because he fucked Aria first.I hope whosever it is it will be a girl and look alot like Aria(:Oh yeah dont have the chibi if Seto's have two colors of hair.Brown and white are a ugly combination:Pwould definately not look cute on anyone.Anyway I was wondering if this new baby will have any purpose in this story?You dont have to tell me shit but I would really appreciate a yes or no answer.
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Reviewed By: CC On: January 18, 2008 00:30 EST
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Man.I havent read this in forever.I see Kai and Rhett are displaying shadow magic.Though I thought Rhett wouldnt show his powers until later becuase he's like a year old.Speaking of babies,Aria's pregnant again.I knew my friend was telling the truth.So I'm guessing the baby is Seto's because he fucked Aria first.I hope whosever it is it will be a girl and look alot like Aria(:Oh yeah dont have the chibi if Seto's have two colors of hair.Brown and white are a ugly combination:Pwould definately not look cute on anyone.Anyway I was wondering if this new baby will have any purpose in this story?You dont have to tell me shit but I would really appreciate a yes or no answer.
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Reviewed By: bb On: November 28, 2007 19:23 EST
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Yay blood and gore!They will think twice before messing with Seto's family.I hope Bakura will be okay next chapter*cuddles him* he doesnt deserve to suffer.Aside from that, did Rhett bring the plant to life?He was at Ryo's a few hourse ago.I kinda doubt it because he's to young to be showing shadow powers.I know Kai is though.But from what I've heard, doesnt have the ability to bring dead things to life.Though maybe you changed around some things.I dont really know but I kind of have an idea.Well thats all I have to say for now.I cant wait for the next chap or chappies(:Bye!
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Reviewed By: Kailani On: November 28, 2007 19:11 EST
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Go Bakura!Only the yami's could kill people in the most inhumane ways possible.That was awesome^_^I read this chapter very closely. I found that the plant of Ryo's that had died is alive now.I heard Rhett would have powers over dead.Was it him who brought it to life?Though he is what, a year old now?I didnt think he would be able to show powers at that young of an age.Though in ch10 Steven said he was overwhelmed by the boy's powers.So maybe that ment he would already be showing magic.Now if that was Rhett who brought the plant to life,I wonder what abilities Kai will display?Oh since the tablet said Aria would bear sons that would cause chaos,command the heavens,and lead the restless dead, does that mean since it seems that the other two are showing these abilities that this new kid wont have shadow powers?I really hope the child does.Even if its just power similiar to Aria's.I mean since this kid would be as much yami as Kai and Rhett shouldnt it have powers as well as them?Well that and if I'm right then we'll have a chibi Aria and I would like to see a girl yami.If you decide not to have that happen its your choice and story after all.I love to see all these magical powers.I'm really into that stuff.So seeing another girl with shadow powers would brighten up my fantasy world awhole lot(: But again, if everything is the opposite,oh well.Anyway I cant wait for the next update^_^ Hopefully we can have two chaps in one update like before.Please.
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Title: I'm still loving this story!
Reviewed By: The Schizo of Destiny (not logged in) On: November 07, 2007 09:52 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I have been reading this story for a long time and you never cease to amaze me with what you write. I love the storyline, since it's both realistic and has anime elements as well, and I love your original characters as well. I'm looking forward to your next update, keep up the good work! ^_^
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