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| "Sword of Supreme Conquest" Reviews/Comments [ 59 ] | | Pages (4): [ 1 2 3 4 › » ] | Title: And the end arrived...
Reviewed By: midcat [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2010 05:43 CDT
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Well, I made it, and all I can say is that there is a sad smile in my face by now; it was sad to see Inu go, specially after all his suffering for Kagome, but he died doing something he always wanted to do (protect those important to him) and that took some of the edge away from the sadness. It's a bittersweet ending for me, because I felt sad for him & Rin, but it also warmed my heart to see the children and the legacy that he left behind. The love between Kagome & Sesshomaru stood death and time and everything in between, so that made the sweet part of the story, and the epilogue was just the perfect ending to a wonderful story! I look forward to more from you and wish you the best this life has to offer!! Thank you for writing, thank you for sharing and thank you for making all our heart strings vibrate with so many emotions!! Hugs: MidCat
| Title: Chapter 18 review
Reviewed By: midcat [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2010 18:51 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow!! That's the only word that comes to my mind after reading this chapter!! WOW!! It was so full of emotion that I was glued to my screen!! There is so much I could say but I guess that the only way to describe it is AMAZING!! One of the best chapters I have ever read!! And you are right, there is so much pain and anguish that it's hard to figure out who is going to suffer the most!! I also want to commend you on the realistic setting of this chapter in comparison to the chapter that I previously reviewed!! This time everything flowed in such an amazing way nothing could have pried me away from it!! Thank you again for sharing your writing skills with us!!
| Title: Chapter 9 Review Notes
Reviewed By: midcat [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2010 15:13 CDT
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So far I love the story, however I just wanted to do a small thing of constructive criticism about this chapter. Usually while reading a story I picture everything in my mind the way the writer wrote it in, however I had a very hard time picturing Kagome standing up between Sesshomaru & Inuyasha right after giving birth to her baby; specially after such a difficult birth; I could see her probably screaming and stopping their actions even crying or throwing something at them, but not standing up. I know this is your story and I will not ever presume to tell you how to write your own story, but in order to make it believable, you must understand that some things could not be possible and would just take away from the story, by making the reader think "What? She did what? After all that?? NO way!!" I was reading the story and the continuity was perfect until that moment and then it was like "We interrupt this story to bring you..." and everything went out the window just to try to make sense of that small detail. As I said before, I love the story so far, and everything was developing nicely, until the aliens came down and Kagome realized that she was actually in love with one of them and decided to do the mating dance in order to show her love! See how that would just make you go "HUH??" Just the same way I went "HUH?" after reading Kagome actually standing up and rushing between Sesshomaru & Inuyasha. In a way, it didn't make sense because my mind kept telling me that it was not possible for a woman that went through such a difficult childbirth to just suddenly stand up and rush to stop a fight. I tell you this as a woman who has witnessed several births and who has given birth to children of her own, so perhaps if you could consider this it would allow you to see that writing that small part took away from the story by distracting some of the readers into thinking of the actual possibility of that happening and the rest of the story. I know it did to me at least because rather than continuing to read, it got me thinking about how unlikely that was to happen, and got me thinking back to my own experiences and the ones I have been part of and trying to see it happening and knowing that the possibility of that actually happen would be slim to none. Sorry for the long ramble, I just wanted to express my opinion on the matter (not that it matters much since the story is already written, but for future reference), that in order to keep the reader glued to the story, you have to make it as believable as possible, so they can relate to the plot and the characters and follow the story flawlessly. Thank you for understanding and once again, I apologize for the long rant. Hugs: Midnight Cat
| Reviewed By: junebug On: July 02, 2008 11:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I read Incomplete and staryed this story today.It really has me hooked.
| Reviewed By: Tana-san On: March 27, 2008 04:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey there my friend...I'm happy to see you decided to leave this fic on a more happy note. I found it most appropriate. I'm sorry I haven't come acrossed it sooner but so much has been happening in my life that the internet is a rare thing for me right now. Back on Jan. 7th Missouri was hit with tornados that put us on the national news. My family and I were home in our mobile home when 2 come out of no where and took our home, 3 vehicles and the roof off our barn. We lost alot but we are all alive and have ben moving from place to place as we have received little help with housing. It's truly a long story and we've learned that alot of people want to scam you after a traumatic thing as this and the "so called" government help like FEMA are nothing when these things happen. Red Cross gave us a card for $1,500 to get necessities and that was it. We called and wrote so many places and spoke to so many organizations, churches and such; nothing. After the first week and a half the man power of helpers my husband had no longer came. The weather turned bitter and rainy then freezing. I got the flu and the trauma threw the fibromyalgia and chronic fatigue into full gear. I fought to help as much as I could but my mom and I were really no help at all. Basically my husband, daughter and older sister and her girl friend were the only ones left to get anything done. But after 3 months of turmoil we've ended up in an apartment in Springfield and are awaiting the set up of our new manufactured home. It's a 2007, 3 bdrm, 2 bath, 28' by 60' home that cost us almost all the money Mom had insurance for. We believe my dad before he died did something to the policy so it wasn't very much. It's all going to be ok though because God is good all the time and we're alive to prove it. Did I tell you we were in the mobile home when we were hit? Hmmm, yeah and I never want to do THAT again!!! I get very little time to get online,usually just to pay bills but I just had to peek through to see if I could find something short to read before sleeping. My heart doctor increased one of my BP meds and and my family MD changed my pain and muscle meds so this keeps me fighting just to stay awake. Just as soon as the new place is home and I don't have to borrow someone's phone line, I'll be back to my reading again. Can't wait to read your new fic. Doesn't matter if it's S/K or I/K I'll read it because of your talent as a writer even tho I prefer S/K. I miss you all and my fics desparately and 2 of my fic writers actually worried enough to write my email to see if I was alive and well. Made me feel special, you know? I read their stuff on a daily basis and never miss an update so I guess I made real friends. You know, the friends I had here never called, stopped at the property or wrote me to see how I was. Ain't that a kick in the heart? We were all over the news and in the papers...makes me see the truth about some people. Out of sight, IS out of mind. At least my fanfic world friends care. Thanks for always being my friend, Langus. Take care and hopefully by the end of April I'll be back in full swing with reading and reviewing. Sorry to use this for personal note but I lost your email. Can you write me back? v-lazar@sbcglobal.net I have to pay bills weekly so I borrow a phone line and check my email too. Love and many gentle hugs, JEN
| Reviewed By: Katana_Kiba_63 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2008 18:18 CST
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that was definitely just that little something this fic needed to wrap itself up. this one goes in my top 10. : )
| Reviewed By: Kibo [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2008 07:17 CST
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*crazy applause* Fabulous! Perfect ending. See, just needed that little something. And I love that they named their second child after Yash. Very touching. Now you can focus on LSR! Woo hoo!
| Reviewed By: Katana_Kiba_63 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 06, 2007 16:27 CDT
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I'd suggest an epilouge, going and getting permision from Takahashi-sensei, then making these stories into real books. Any InuYasha fan with half a brain would love them!
| Reviewed By: Kibo [MediaMiner Member] On: October 05, 2007 07:08 CDT
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I say go for the epilogue. *Sniffles* You really did kill him, didn't you? Well, that just sucks. But I understand plot-wise. Things could never be settled betweeen Kags and Inu - they'd always have that connection, and it would always piss of Fluffy. Yeah, nice neat little epilogue, something... happy and light.
| Reviewed By: Tana-san On: October 05, 2007 04:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmmm, if it must end here it was done sufficently enough to answer most questions and understand what Sesshoumaru had done when he changed time. No matter what anyone else might say, I totally love these 2 fics and I just hope that you will write another. If you do, please email me if you're posting here or at another site. Thanks, Love and hugs, JEN
| Reviewed By: inu_miko [MediaMiner Member] On: October 03, 2007 13:46 CDT
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i really loved this story although i do believe it is a good way to end it. if you choose to write more...i will read it.
| Title: inu_miko
Reviewed By: inu_miko [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2007 22:13 CDT
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i love your story. you had me confused for awhile but i got through it. i hope you update soon. and i hope school is going good. until next time
| Reviewed By: Katana_Kiba_63 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 26, 2007 20:27 CDT
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that last chap (39) had me sobbing by the end! *sniffs* I'm still crying! ...but it was so sweet too....
| Title: loved your story!
Reviewed By: Alexjandra On: September 22, 2007 14:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I absolutely loved this story! I read the first and second in just a day. I could not stop reading. It is an addicting story. It was creative and awsome. Please write more!!!!!
| Title: You ARE alive! Yay!
Reviewed By: Kibo [MediaMiner Member] On: September 21, 2007 20:28 CDT
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Hmmm... interesting... gotta love Fluffy's resolution to keep her! He has that level head I envy! No impulsive behavior... haha... except that damn temper... anywhoodle, i know how that whole life thing goes... glad you came back to it
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