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Reviewed By: shikiori [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2007 14:59 CST
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This is an awsome story. It links way too much into my love life for my liking though. People continously call me a 'cutter' and my current boyfriend is a lot like InuYasha, but that's not your fault so continue writing and updating!
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Title: Tyler
Reviewed By: codex On: February 04, 2007 16:03 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
so you took my advice huh well you go girl i am proud of you but don't think this gets you off the hook c'mon write the next four chapters now. kagome-yeah i wanna know what happens with me and inuyasha inuyasha-yeah and do we kiss then well you know we start to well kagome-pervert sit sit sit see even those two want to read what happens so c'mon on with da story i'm gettin inpatiant here because this is a great story and you can't do this to your readers rihgt kagome? kagome-hell yeah inuyasha- you better hury up and finish kagome- inuyasha honey inuyasha- y-y-yeah kagome kagome-sit see what i mean c'mon pleaseeeeeeeeeeee i really love this story beacause you are a good writer right guys? kagome and inuyasha-yeah ''pouts'' well alright thats all i got to say for now bye. oh and don't forget four chapters tonight i'll come back and see and if they are done if there not done inuyasha is going to drive me crazy and i'm gonna have to go to the anime insane asylem thanx bye. inuyasha-hey i don't make people crazy so piss of me-inuyasha shut up inuyasha-aint nothin doin me and kagome-inuyasha sit boy kagome,me,and inuyasha-bye!!!!
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Reviewed By: star555555528(not signed on) On: February 02, 2007 15:29 CST
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Hey, you have some errors again sooo email the chapters & I'll fix then again. It's going really well so far!
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Reviewed By: the unnamed critic. On: January 03, 2007 18:14 CST
Comment/Review:
in chapter 4, the first paragraph says she`s sixteen, but when she introduces herself, she says she`s fifteen?
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Reviewed By: star555555528 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 01, 2007 21:20 CST
Comment/Review:
Awesome story!!! I totally love it. you did have spelling errors. if youd like I will read over them.
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Title: ...
Reviewed By: megtheteler [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2006 01:56 CST
Comment/Review:
pretty good for 2 chappies. u just described 2 of my friends there, so its kinda easy to visualize.
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Reviewed By: triviatrap1982 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2006 13:37 CST
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Hey this is a good story, but I noticed a couple of unintentional spelling errors though. Nothing to major, just something stupid like I'd end up doing...like replacing hand for hard. Still it's a good take on the many stories in the Inuyasha universe.
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Reviewed By: InusBasket [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2006 11:45 CST
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Nice story! Update soon!
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