| "Heavy Bond" Reviews/Comments [ 47 ] |
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Reviewed By: Rourinu On: February 16, 2007 22:25 EST
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Great lemon! I'm glad someone FINALLY took care of Kakarotto. Looks like Vegeta is starting to come around too though. Looks like the brothers are going to have some issues soon. I wanted to make a suggestion though. Your writing is great, but the only thing I think you need to work on is using their names less. I know it sounds weird, but I think there was one sentence in there that had Kakarotto's name in it three times. Try using 'the younger Saiyajin', or 'the older Saiyajin', or 'the other'.... well, you get the point. It'll flow better. Otherwise, onward!
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Reviewed By: Serena1985 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 16, 2007 21:38 EST
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O.O Lol now what's going to happen! So hot, steamy, and delicious by the way! In my opinion I thik this should have been the union in the first place! Lol but it's your story and I'm eager for more so update soon please!
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Reviewed By: sun_raye [MediaMiner Member] On: February 12, 2007 12:00 EST
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It's great so far, write more please!
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Reviewed By: Serena1985 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 02, 2007 06:06 EST
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Well damn someone needs a lesson in emotional control. Lol damn goos fic so far can't wait for the update!
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Reviewed By: ~JuSt-An_OuTcAsT~ [MediaMiner Member] On: January 31, 2007 19:44 EST
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wow..that chapter was brutal at the end...poor Kakarott...Good chapter can't wait to see what happens next!
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Reviewed By: newdkidt [MediaMiner Member] On: January 26, 2007 14:17 EST
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i love how kakarott snaps back at vegeta. and vegeta is turely a fool.
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Reviewed By: ~JuSt-An_OuTcAsT~ [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2007 20:55 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think this is off to a good start. I can't wait to see more!
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Title: update
Reviewed By: jujubean On: January 22, 2007 17:56 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
chapter two was really great. update soon
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Title: damn this is great
Reviewed By: tamie On: January 22, 2007 17:53 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i can't wait til the next chapter. i want to see what vegeta's going to do.
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Reviewed By: Serena1985 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 18, 2007 21:02 EST
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LMAO man that was a mess. Kakarott (Hope I spelled that right since I've never really used it before)knocked the hell out of Vegeta. Well at least the prince realized homie was drunk and didn't kick his ass. Lol I can't wait for the update! Man that's two of your stories I'm totally hooked to! You're good lol!
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Reviewed By: Rourinu On: January 18, 2007 13:20 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOL! Oh, I loved that Kakarotto punched Vegeta right in the face. Great chapter :) Can't wait for more!
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Title: loved it
Reviewed By: newdkidt [MediaMiner Member] On: January 18, 2007 12:53 EST
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that was funny i can't believe he punched vegeta. i was sure that vegeta would of beat the crap out of kakarott. i like korinto he's someone you can trust. well until next chapter, so update kay.
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Reviewed By: Rourinu On: January 12, 2007 13:11 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*claps* Yay! I like this ficcy! It has its own original flare to it. Can't wait to read more and see how Vegeta and Kakarotto get along :) Please update soon!
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Reviewed By: Serena1985 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2007 07:59 EST
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Well first I'll be truthful and say that this is the first DBZ fan fic I've ever read. I'm not a big fan of twisting this show because it was one of the first anime's I fell in love with. But your fic seems different and I'm hoping I'll like it. Don't get me wrong I have a very extinsive yaoi collection so I love yaoi. But anyway I like how the fic's progressing so far and I hope you update soon.
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Title: please update
Reviewed By: newdkidt [MediaMiner Member] On: January 10, 2007 21:01 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love the show Dragon Ball Z, but i don't read alot of the fanfics. and i have to say this one really got my attention. i really loved reading it. i have to say this is the best DBZ fanfic. i really hope that you will update on this.
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