| "Yakunan Rijun" Reviews/Comments [ 91 ] |
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Reviewed By: RW (:B not logged in) On: August 13, 2007 13:08 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
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:D The spelling and grammar errors are worse than they've ever been in this chapter, Fenn, most of them within the first 10 sentences of the chapter. Very interesting! Are they REALLY in the right time? But then what are going to do with the Demon General taken? D: Well, doing good, update asap! :333
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Title: Hmm...
Reviewed By: Charon the wish I had an account Sabercat On: August 13, 2007 11:40 CDT
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It was okay. It's like corn starch. Plot thickening, but no real substance until the very end. I liked Nick and Nack, though. (brain still hurting at the riddle) Laterness.
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Title: I Must Say...
Reviewed By: Zero 101 On: August 13, 2007 10:17 CDT
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I was just curious and looked at a chapter, and it just so happened to be the one when Captain sweared! That was a gust buster!!! :D O.K.... Now that I got that out of my system back to lunch! *scarfs left over chinese food* Yum. ^-^
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Title: BRAINSTORM!!!
Reviewed By: Sayla On: July 15, 2007 19:49 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wait a minute... Future Shute was captured by the Angel of Death's army, presumed dead. Rifleman has a tuft of hair, and remembers Shute from somewhere. Could Rifleman be Shute!? Please update soon, and solve this mystery! (P.S.-Is the Angel of Death Demon General? Gaaaaahh! So many mysteries!)
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Title: O__O
Reviewed By: Sayla On: July 15, 2007 10:10 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awesome chapter. The opponents just get cooler and cooler. Now that that's over, RelegotlaidbyShute!? Haha, do they have kids? Update soon, please!
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Reviewed By: Cybertoy On: July 14, 2007 19:51 CDT
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Good chapter, thanks for using my chars. You did a nice job with them. Plotwise, pretty good. Spellingwise and grammarwise, you need help. Too many errors to mention. I'd go over the chapter and undo all the errors.
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Title: I'll explain on the board, but anyway
Reviewed By: Charon the (new mommy) Sabercat On: July 14, 2007 11:53 CDT
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WOOHOOOO! UPDATE-ITUDE! "Stop being emo!" "I'm not emo!" I live for dialogue like that! I love this chapter! I also love how Zero and Baku automatically go into daddy mode whenever the kids start fighting. Catcha later!
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Reviewed By: May-VeggieGirl1 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2007 08:03 CDT
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It's godmodded, dear, not Mary-Sued. A Mary-Sue is when you make a character whose a victim but yet completely interferes and takes the spotlight of a story and almost always is based off of the author writing it's fantasies of being that said character. Fluer would be the only one with a chance of being Mary-Sue, but she's not, so don't worry. :D *huggle* Good chapter, when Shute goes to say Ninko was a spy, you missed the word 'spy' and other than that, well done. ^_^ *goes off to work on her own fic* Keep it up! Update soon please!
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Reviewed By: May-VeggieGirl1 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2007 15:29 CDT
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Wah, the updates have ceased... ;o; Just like mine... *tear*
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Reviewed By: TDAT-CrystalDragon [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2007 10:19 CDT
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I caught up! Yes! Very exciting chapter FFD!! Loved the battle scenes and how you drew it out in Ark. Baku has twins! XP Reminds me of my version of Baku's kids Seikamaru and Nami. XDDD So Daichi's in on it now, sweet! He seems like a promising character. I look forward to future updates!
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Title: Sayla
Reviewed By: Sayla_Gathermoon [MediaMiner Member] On: May 24, 2007 12:31 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay! Baku had twins! Heheh, bet they cause trouble! I hope Future Shute is okay... Update soon, please!
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Reviewed By: Cybertoy00 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 24, 2007 09:28 CDT
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huh! A new guy who's Bakunetsumaru's son! What next? Some good fighting, but Kibaomaru's special move is Morai Ten-Bazan, no Kiuma oukatana.
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Title: Iabi was good
Reviewed By: Charon the much happier Sabercat On: May 17, 2007 21:50 CDT
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Isosceles was perfect. Chapter was (deep breathe) AWESOME! AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME KIBAAAA! I like Daichi. Why doesn't his name end in "-maru", though?
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Reviewed By: May-VeggieGirl1 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 17, 2007 05:20 CDT
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Exact reaction upon seeing Kouheimaru: "Kouheimaru- EEEE! x3" Great chapter, I've got finals coming up too (today! X_X) but I'm glad to see at least you've managed to pull up this great chapter for us! Gambate~! *thumnbs up* (hooray for the B-Maru twins! n.n)
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Title: Hmmm...
Reviewed By: Sayla On: April 30, 2007 06:16 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Does Baku have kids? Nice chapter, update soon!
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