| "Different Circumstances" Reviews/Comments [ 106 ] |
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Reviewed By: Bastion [MediaMiner Member] On: September 08, 2007 02:11 EDT
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I take it the events in this story is running parallel to the Arrancar storyline where Ichigo and the gang is trying to rescue Orihime, right? It'll be interesting to see how you depict the goings on in the SS when all that goes down. BTW, I do have one critique on something I noticed recently. Most of your dialog, with the exception of Zaraki, seems... choppy. I mean it comes off kinda like I'm reading dialog from the Illiad or something. It works very well for Zaraki but I noticed that the style of speak doesn't really change much from one character to another. I really noticed it with Unohana. She seems to me like someone who choose her words wisely and be a little ... I guess smoother in her delivery than she is in the last chapter. That's not to say it ruins the story, it's just a pattern I noticed and I thought it was worth pointing out.
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Title: Fantastic
Reviewed By: Animelover123 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 05, 2007 17:35 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It captures zaraki's additude alot. not the pairing i would expect. all in all it was awsome!!!! Two thumbs up.
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Reviewed By: Bastion [MediaMiner Member] On: August 10, 2007 12:07 EDT
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Hooray, you decided to continue this! I think you need to continue this because you brought up a good point Ran doesn't a thing about Zaraki and honestly I'm kinda curious as to what you got up your sleeve. Now keep going ya lousy bastard. ;p
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Title: want review?
Reviewed By: yuwa [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2007 22:21 EDT
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first of all i think why you get so few reviews are from the pairings...but i dont really mind that...actually your story is good. keep up the good work. its gettting shit here with all the YAOI coming out.^-^v
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Reviewed By: Bastion [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2007 19:03 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
"You've said you love me. I unwillingly love you. Logically we should marry." lol, it's lines like these from Zaraki that made this story for me. Very good read and though the ending seemed abit rushed, well, for once I thought it was appropriate considering the characters involved. Nice work!
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Title: Update
Reviewed By: magicsmith [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2007 01:15 EDT
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So, when are you updating? I like the lemon. Nicely done.
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Title: Lemonlisicious!
Reviewed By: luna_spellsprite [MediaMiner Member] On: May 27, 2007 20:23 EDT
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Keeps getting better! MORE!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Toki Mirage [MediaMiner Member] On: May 27, 2007 17:14 EDT
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*sighs contently* a realistic Zaraki relationship.... You should really spell it out for people in the summary. I didn't know what the FUCK this story was about until the end of the first chapter. *glares* That's not very effective at promoting your story. Anyway, again this is an AWESOME Zaraki romance. Totally realistic. Totally, absolutely, WICKEDLY realistic, and he still falls in love at the end!!! *laughs and grins* Fucking awesome. Please update again soon! ^^
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Reviewed By: happygirl24 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 27, 2007 10:16 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
so good
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Title: rarher sad ending
Reviewed By: Hellstern [MediaMiner Member] On: May 27, 2007 07:54 EDT
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hehe lemon non-stop=) u like your story - how you put a storyline into lemon sequence. i enjoy it all! keep going! thank you!
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Title: =)
Reviewed By: Hellstern [MediaMiner Member] On: May 13, 2007 02:19 EDT
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At last that has waited! YAY! keep going!
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Title: AND?!?!?!
Reviewed By: luna_spellsprite [MediaMiner Member] On: April 28, 2007 17:39 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
ohhhhhhhh KEEP GOING!!!!!!!
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Title: i like the pairing
Reviewed By: Hellstern [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2007 09:43 EDT
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i think that was quite unexpected, because of "I" in first chapter... but it giving the story some interesting plot now. And a very unusual and rare pairing! I like it! Can't wait for a next chapter!
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Title: Luscious Lemon!
Reviewed By: luna_spellsprite [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2007 15:16 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Might help to identify the "I". A clever wording early on could accomplish that easlily by stating which captian had done the sending. It would help with visiualzation as to who is "interrupting his bath". Having to find out in the 2nd chap who has taken his fancy really changes the mood. Personally I wouldn't have paired the two of them, but I am new to the series so I am not sure how their interactions play out farther than I have gotten. The tone of rape could have been down played quite a bit. 2nd chap statement says she'd been watching him. If that were stated earlier it would low key the event to an almost "unexpected surprise". She did, after all, know that SOME type of repercussion would come from disturbing him. As I stated, I wouldn't have paired the two... but that won't keep me from watching how you play this out. Keep going! Honestly I think you could go alot farther than just 3-4 chapters with this one.
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Title: wow!
Reviewed By: Hellstern [MediaMiner Member] On: April 05, 2007 00:44 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's very good Zaraki story! please continue!
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