| "The Pure Miko" Reviews/Comments [ 109 ] |
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Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2009 01:38 CST
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i love this story and hope i can read more soon
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Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2008 03:38 CST
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thank you for the update, i really love this story. poor kagome, if kurama would only talk to sess about sharing her i'm sure things would work out.
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Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 25, 2008 01:13 CDT
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this is a great story, please update it soon
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Title: Great story - some pointers though
Reviewed By: BluEyedTigress [MediaMiner Member] On: July 02, 2008 00:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hiya animebook fan, I'm new to your story (I've only red the first chapter so far :D), and I must say that it is quite good! And that's something coming from me. You definitely have a lot of potential. But I do feel I must follow your request and give you a constructive review. While I agree wholeheartedly that a good, let alone a great, author or authoress should not have to explain when they are changing point of views, it is also imperative that you are careful of how you express yourself. .. Now that sounded weird... uhmm.... Oh, I know! For example: you repeat the same phrase or restate the same idea or event a little bit. Like when you said the professor was going on and on, and when Kurama was describing how his attention was caught. It makes for a slightly awkward reading and a tad repetitive. I know you want to highlight the feeling and emotion of the scene and keep the reader up-to-date with what is going on - but perhaps switching the way you describe it so that you do not come off as repetitive would be more engaging. Your plotline, thus far, *is* engaging, don't get me wrong, and I love where the story is headed - and I've only read the first chapter. But I feel I must be honest when I say that I had to make myself studiously read through some of your more repetitive parts, which made the story drag a little bit. :( Please, please, PLEASE don't think I am flaming or fussing or anything like that, I am simply trying to be as constructive to you as my friends and family have been and are for me in my scribblings. I definitely plan to continue reading your story, as it is extremely interesting and entertaining, but, if you would prefer, I will stop reviewing if I have upset you, for that was not my intent. If you don't mind - I can copy and paste parts of your first chapter and .... edit it.... in an attempt to show you what I mean, if you like it, I would not mind at all giving you pointers or being your "beta" as the saying goes. :) It is a wonderful story, the characters feel real and true to their original selves, and I cannot wait to continue on this adventure you are spinning! If you would like to contact me (to tell me that you are not interested in my help and would prefer I did not comment on your writing style, or to say that you are) my e-mail address is blueyedvalentine@yahoo.com - please feel absolutely free to let me know either way! Wonderful wonderful story! Keep up the good work! ~blueyedval
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Reviewed By: Sessy'sgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: June 09, 2008 00:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is so good, plz update
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Title: The Pure Miko
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: May 22, 2008 11:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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Reviewed By: lex1621 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 12, 2008 18:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story and I can't wait to see how things develop between Kagome and her love interests!
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Reviewed By: Tricia1224 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2008 22:40 CST
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Awesome chapter. I love the way Kagome gives it to Koenma. I didn't notice any problems with spelling or grammar. I am looking forward to the next update.
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Reviewed By: crystal lilith [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2008 21:15 CST
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Nice...I'm really enjoying reading this especially Kagome being authoritative when the situations needs it.
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Reviewed By: Dragon Dagger [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2008 20:11 CST
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*Claps happily while laughing evilly* Kagome just nailed Koenma to the wall with that last announcement LOL. I'm really looking forward to seeing how he and his father will react to this bit of news as well as her ability to "undermine" their authority with the spirit detectives. Good writing! DD
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Reviewed By: Tricia1224 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 18, 2007 12:49 CST
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I really am enjoying this story. I can definitely say that this is one of the better fics I have read. A few have grabbed my attention and then lost it about 2 or 3 chapters later because the plot got stupid or it follows something else to closely. Although the grammar and spelling needs some work, this story grabs my attention and keeps it. I am looking forward to your next chapter. Keep up the wonderful imagination, and smile.
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Title: This is a Review/Rating
Reviewed By: Sesshysgirl06 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 15, 2007 20:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
your story is wonderful, keep up the good work, and i hope that a lemon comes soon. That's the main reason i started to read this fic. lemons are awesome. hopefully you will update soon. your style has been used over and over again. Although your characterization is excellent, kagome looks and sound like herself from the descriptions given to me.Spelling and grammar: You need a beta. Originality: excellent job, your story is the first that i have read where kagome doesn't work for spirit world. i like how you've woven this aspect into the story. Enjoyment Factor: one of the few stories that i actually looked for on different sites to find the continuation of. on deviant art, it says I'm not allowed to read this story. I don't usually look elsewhere to see if a fic has been continued elsewhere. Overall Rating: Excellent, very well done, you have written it so that i want to read more. you've been able to use a talent that most authors use to suck readers into reading there story. I hope that if you pursue a career in writing, that you can publish many good books that people will read. i hope that you would sell many as well. ~Sesshys_girl06 or Elehanna~
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Reviewed By: crystal lilith [MediaMiner Member] On: November 15, 2007 14:12 CST
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I am so loving this story more and more with each chapter and unfolding events. Dude, that f'en letter freaking irritated me. It made have a slight desire to knock him the hell out. All in all thank you for the love story & updated chapter. I greatly enjoyed it especially Kagome's optimistic demeanor after her release of power.
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Reviewed By: HeartStar [MediaMiner Member] On: November 15, 2007 12:35 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh please update I can't wait to see what you write next. I love this story.
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Reviewed By: fifi On: October 07, 2007 19:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo I thought i thwarted ur fanfic on fanfictgion.net so i could read everything but u didn't finish T_T please hurry
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