| "Unfamiliar" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Title: wtf?
Reviewed By: KillerRabbit [MediaMiner Member] On: October 03, 2010 17:37 CDT
Comment/Review:
poorly written, if the story is not going to tell me what it's about then write a summary. and the end was all jumbled up, we need a clear and precise character description of who these people are and their relationship to shinji. and the timeline at the moment. is it after or during the angels?
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Reviewed By: BornUndead [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2008 14:06 CDT
Comment/Review:
I enjoyed your story. Though i have to say it on the said of constructive critisim. You may want to spell check and read over your draft before you load up. Only to catch several diffrent bits to clean up. That being said I really enjoyed this and I hope you update it soon.
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Reviewed By: deckman1063 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2007 10:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
Interesting idea setup here, it has lots of potential. HOWEVER, spelling and grammar are a big problem in this work - capitalization, incorrect or awkward word choices, fragmentary sentences, all made this harder to read than it needs to be. Try to run a spell and grammar check before posting, or get a competent pre-reader/editor, and you will be amazed at the improvement. I do want to see what happens to Shinji in this story - please write more.
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